No Star I Can See Poem by Neela Nath Das

No Star I Can See

Rating: 4.3

There is no star,
Which I can see
From my window...
Boundless darkness
Is here in the
Chest of night.
The painted sky,
I saw in the daylight
Now is wiped away
As my last poem
I wrote but made
it vanish from
The page, because
It couldn't tell
The blank story,
Of my desolate star
Still is visible
From this window..
Someone has spread
The melted pitch
On the road of my
Moped sky..I stare
And stare all night.
The caged breeze,
The starless sky
And night, none can share
My loneliness, I know
They are no living
Persons like me...
But, they can drown me
In complete void of
Sea of utter darkness.
One star can do this;
Only one star......
Thru my little window,
It's flickering light,
Can fill my dark room,
With its heavenly touch!

Jeremiah Adediran 30 June 2012

The piece is great Nilakshi, I like it. The arrangement, pattern and formation is brilliant. However, I'd have to scrutinize the lines pretty well to be able to underscore constructive criticism. P.S. I think you may add a little hyperbolic contrast; 'My loneliness on my sleepless pillows, I know there...'

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Kasia Fedyk 30 June 2012

Oh Nilakishi, this is absolutely beautiful, it is breathtaking and I feel so much when I read this. Only one star that is upon you with its Divine Light it shines through you in its completeness. Always! :) Love

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Great! .... Don't understand it to its fullest but d construction just makes it loveable to read.... Nice job! ;)

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Unwritten Soul 30 June 2012

Look there Nilakshi, there is a new born star..could be a new hope for life...Even there's no star be it as yourself..shine and bright nice to share...i can feel this poem though, keep writing NIl! _Unwritten Soul

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eloida Capuno 01 July 2012

I am drowned in your sea of loneliness, but wait i saw a flicker of light from a distance. This could be the star you are searching for! You write so well i can feel i am near you in that window. Keep writing NN your work is always something to look forward to. All the best!

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Dr Dillip K Swain 04 February 2022

Moped sky..I stare And stare all night. The caged breeze, The starless sky And night, none can share My loneliness....magnificent poetic expression. A wonderful score.

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Kumarmani Mahakul 11 November 2015

In boundless darkness still I do not able to see stars around me through window. Still I hope to fill darkness with bright stars. Very interesting imagery is drawn definitely. Nice sharing.....10

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Ken E Hall 19 August 2014

That star was the light at the end of a dark day sadness with gladness great to read...regards

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Babatunde Aremu 11 July 2012

Great poem. One STAR that can actually do it is GOD. Hold on to His garment

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Captain Cur 04 July 2012

Brilliant, touching, sad and mortal. A wonderful write. I hope you find your star!

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