There is no star,
Which I can see
From my window...
Boundless darkness
Is here in the
Chest of night.
The painted sky,
I saw in the daylight
Now is wiped away
As my last poem
I wrote but made
it vanish from
The page, because
It couldn't tell
The blank story,
Of my desolate
Life...no star
Still is visible
From this window..
Someone has spread
The melted pitch
On the road of my
Moped sky..I stare
And stare all night.
The caged breeze,
The starless sky
And night, none can share
My loneliness, I know
They are no living
Persons like me...
But, they can drown me
In complete void of
Sea of utter darkness.
One star can do this;
Only one star......
Thru my little window,
It's flickering light,
Can fill my dark room,
With its heavenly touch!
Oh Nilakishi, this is absolutely beautiful, it is breathtaking and I feel so much when I read this. Only one star that is upon you with its Divine Light it shines through you in its completeness. Always! :) Love
Great! .... Don't understand it to its fullest but d construction just makes it loveable to read.... Nice job! ;)
Look there Nilakshi, there is a new born star..could be a new hope for life...Even there's no star be it as yourself..shine and bright others....so nice to share...i can feel this poem though, keep writing NIl! _Unwritten Soul
I am drowned in your sea of loneliness, but wait i saw a flicker of light from a distance. This could be the star you are searching for! You write so well i can feel i am near you in that window. Keep writing NN your work is always something to look forward to. All the best!
Moped sky..I stare And stare all night. The caged breeze, The starless sky And night, none can share My loneliness....magnificent poetic expression. A wonderful poem.......top score.
In boundless darkness still I do not able to see stars around me through window. Still I hope to fill darkness with bright stars. Very interesting imagery is drawn definitely. Nice sharing.....10
That star was the light at the end of a dark day sadness with gladness great to read...regards
Great poem. One STAR that can actually do it is GOD. Hold on to His garment
Brilliant, touching, sad and mortal. A wonderful write. I hope you find your star!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
The piece is great Nilakshi, I like it. The arrangement, pattern and formation is brilliant. However, I'd have to scrutinize the lines pretty well to be able to underscore constructive criticism. P.S. I think you may add a little hyperbolic contrast; 'My loneliness on my sleepless pillows, I know there...'