Once Poem by Brian Mayo

Once

Rating: 4.0


I once wrote a poem so transparent
That no one who read it could see
The masterpiece clearly inherent
But visible only to me.

I once wrote a poem so confusing
Not one understood what it meant
And though each word was of my choosing
I too, cannot guess its intent.

I once wrote a poem so disgusting
Each person who read it got sick
I think with a little adjusting
It won't happen nearly so quick.

Monday, May 16, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: funny,poetry
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jayatissa K. Liyanage 16 May 2016

Poems come in to being by writing down thoughts and reading poems is interpreting them differently. Poetry amounts to both, I feel. Thanks for sharing.

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Brian Mayo 17 May 2016

You're welcome. Thanks for reading and taking the time to respond.

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Bri Edwards 18 December 2016

some new-to-me PH poet left a comment on my Toe Jam poem accusing me of being the writer of sick humor. at least he said humor! bri ;)

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Bri Edwards 05 October 2016

Now twice i've read this Brian Mayo poem, which supplies 'sugar' to me, like does phloem, and though i doubt that the poem's a tree, i'm glad to have found it. was it written for me?

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Pamela Sinicrope 17 May 2016

Yes, you've done all that Brian. And if you can do that, it speaks volumes about your poetry. The use of the term transparent is so multi-layered in this piece, that stacked up together, the lines are difficult to interpret, yet the reader is still left with the bittersweet impression of transparency. A challenging undertaking successfully conveyed. ;) LOL

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Brian Mayo 17 May 2016

Pam, it's like you can see right through me... (chortle, snicker, guffaw)

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Kelly Kurt 17 May 2016

Humor, wit and poetry, all wrapped up in a neat little package. I loved it.

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Brian Mayo 17 May 2016

I'm grateful you've stuck with me, Kelly.

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Sriranji Aratisankar 17 May 2016

Ha ha ha. nice. I think you should not write such poem going through the reader got sick.

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Brian Mayo 17 May 2016

You are, of course, correct. Thanks for playin'.

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