Brian Mayo

Gold Star - 12,344 Points (1960)

Poem Discovered On Cave Wall - Poem by Brian Mayo

I made the wheel
You rolled your eyes

I saw the truth
You called it lies

I asked for love
You made demands

I nurtured fire
You burned your hands.

Topic(s) of this poem: loss, love


Comments about Poem Discovered On Cave Wall by Brian Mayo

  • Bri Edwards (5/17/2016 5:17:00 PM)


    So, they finally found my poem! ! ! !

    Yeah, I suppose the wheel was never used after I died. Yes, my mate was a bitch! She got (part) of what she deserved. Just a part.

    Thanks for sharing it here. To MyPoemList it goes.

    Bri Cromagnon.

    :)
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  • Wes Vogler (11/15/2015 12:06:00 AM)


    I have encountered you here for the first time. Where the hell have you been? That is very colourful and thoughtful stuff. I am betting you write a fine limerick. I'll go looking. I've already met Kelly Kurt and we are good-naturedly battling it out. (Of course he is afraid of me because of my vastly superior intellect.) I like my poems to rhyme but for this one you get a ten (sucking up to you a bit on first encounter) Old Dad (Wes Vogler) By the way in the battle of wits, because of my age I get a fifteen handicap. (Report) Reply

  • Souren Mondal (11/14/2015 4:36:00 AM)


    Loss, love, and maybe a bit of regret somewhere in four parts of two lines and a single sentence.. Technically a brilliant poem Brian.. Thanks for sharing.. (Report) Reply

  • Pamela Sinicrope (11/13/2015 6:08:00 PM)


    SO, I guess this stuff has been going on for a long time now, eh? :) Where's the loss? The hands? I can see there's much love in that cave.... (Report) Reply

    Brian Mayo Brian Mayo (11/14/2015 10:11:00 AM)

    I considered this ending for a long time: I captured fire, but burned my hands

    Is it better? from a woman's perspective? Changes the meaning quite a bit...

  • (11/13/2015 2:01:00 PM)


    Very cute Brian! But, burning hands are not sex linked..: -) (Report) Reply

    Brian Mayo Brian Mayo (11/13/2015 3:59:00 PM)

    fire and burnt hands- -love metaphors.

  • Kelly Kurt (11/13/2015 12:36:00 PM)


    Same since the beginning. Great stuff, Brian (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, November 13, 2015



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