surya surya

Rookie - 77 Points (dec -1948. / kozhikode, @chennai.india)

Potrait Of The Innocents. - Poem by surya surya

i sat up and looked over the vast sea,
huge water body spread over horizon,
like a well mowed British meadow,
in blue sapphire, sharp curves in,
small arcs defining the edges.

suddenly my legs moved, the pace
huge and fast, took met to sea front,
where large waves rushed in menacingly
and crashed short of the silvery shore.

as i wondered, the sea drew back fast,
exposing her belly where i rushed in, fearless
followed by hoards of sea crabs with their long
legs appearing from nowhere, like aliens, and
alas soon tons of water rushed back, soaking me
the soft chill water soothing me body and soul.


as i walked, a young lady moved in
her silhouette defining her petite form
jeans hanging precarious below navel,
trouser pulled up to knee, showing her
lovely little feet chiseled to perfection
in ivory, lovely calf and knee painted pink
and shaded for great visual effect.

she wore soft top, the sea breeze
playing cupid, struck her mild
betraying her lovely frontal form,
when i stood speechless, envying
the lord of creation for the marvel.

as we met she threw a generous smile
her pearly teeth shining in silvery aura
crushed it mild, with a boyish charm, then
quickly held my palm in a tight and warm
hand shake pressing my fragile fingers
the touch chilled and thrilled me instantly
and lowered my age on par with her’s.
=o0o=


Comments about Potrait Of The Innocents. by surya surya

  • Veena Yadav (2/10/2011 2:02:00 AM)

    hello Poet,
    its really a lovely piece penned down.
    nice to see u aftr a long, do tk time to go through my list 2.
    tk cr.
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  • Vinod KumarVinod Kumar (5/1/2010 4:10:00 AM)

    Very Nice art with the colour of the nature, nice wave also like a Joola thanks for sharing,10+ (Report)Reply

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  • Vinod KumarVinod Kumar (5/1/2010 4:08:00 AM)

    Very Nice art with the colour of the nature, nice wave also like a Joola thanks for sharing,10+ (Report)Reply

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  • Hmimi Djamel (4/15/2010 2:16:00 AM)

    great work. it's one of those moments when poetry meets theatre. wonderfull (Report)Reply

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  • Queeny GonaQueeny Gona (4/14/2010 11:43:00 AM)

    I enjoyed your work.Voted 10 (Report)Reply

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  • Indira Babbellapati (4/12/2010 4:32:00 AM)

    by giving this title, do u mean to resurrect your days of innocence? the title is far from appropriate! (Report)Reply

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  • Abhinav Baruah (4/7/2010 5:55:00 AM)

    Nicely crafted poem... beautiful imagery.. Enjoyable read! (Report)Reply

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  • Howard The Motivational Poet SimonHoward The Motivational Poet Simon (4/3/2010 9:27:00 PM)

    Compelling and captivating potraits my friend. (Report)Reply

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  • Nooruddeen MmNooruddeen Mm (4/2/2010 3:39:00 AM)

    Nice one, pleasant to read.
    Good work

    Rdds
    Noor
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  • Rm. Shanmugam ChettiarRm. Shanmugam Chettiar (4/2/2010 12:38:00 AM)

    good. the last line superb. shan mark 10 (Report)Reply

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  • Joseph Poewhit (3/31/2010 12:16:00 AM)

    Paints the picture well of innocence, with a base setting (Report)Reply

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  • Mehta Hasmukh AmathalalMehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/30/2010 8:06:00 PM)

    suddenly my legs moved, the pace
    huge and fast, took met to sea front,
    where large waves rushed in menacingly
    and crashed short of the silvery shore.........................it is simply beautiful to express the beauty of sea in words that too synchronising it with deep thoughts.. i admire your skill dear sir.....10

    read mine... preference to hate... nudge to marry
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  • Gul naz (3/30/2010 11:04:00 AM)

    the scene you have created is so real and the theme you have chosen is very unusual and captivating (Report)Reply

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  • Dr. Sonal Chhaya (3/30/2010 9:51:00 AM)

    Very sensual with wild imagination..lovely Thanks for sharing (Report)Reply

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  • Crusnik Vampy -Samantha Micnheimer (3/30/2010 8:25:00 AM)

    i like it... very different from others i have read. love the imagery. keep it up. (Report)Reply

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  • Mamta Agarwal (3/30/2010 6:46:00 AM)

    very vivid images, ocean, waves, rhythm, music a good setting and good company. a well sketched [portrait Surya.


    Mamta
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  • Lady Grace (3/30/2010 1:59:00 AM)

    i haen; t seen u for a long time surya surya..where have u been? ..k, ur poem is nice as nice as the waves of the sea..nicely done..smileeeeeeeeeee (Report)Reply

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  • Mandara Pookal (3/29/2010 9:02:00 AM)

    Hey boy! One of the most beautiful and sensual poems I have ever read with fullest joy. You write with eclect and unusual sophistication that is marked with sensitivity to the feel of the reader's pride. Love your art. Thank you......mandara (Report)Reply

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  • Kee Thampi (3/29/2010 12:47:00 AM)

    we love to see this poem a berth to world of sea.....
    in a ship
    she wore soft top, the sea breeze
    playing cupid, struck her mild
    betraying her lovely frontal form,
    when i stood speechles, envying
    the lord of creation for the marvel.
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  • Samanyan Lakshminarayanan (3/28/2010 8:21:00 PM)

    beautiful imagery and pleasant to read...keeps one engrossed... (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, March 21, 2010

Poem Edited: Thursday, November 24, 2011


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