Khairul Ahsan

Pristine Love

No love is as overwhelming and as pristine,
As the maiden love of a lass, say of sixteen.
When, like closed petals of a bud she begins to unfold
Herself, blossoming into a fragrant rose or marigold.

She seeks a hand to hold and wants hers as well be held,
In secluded privacy, from the outside world as if shelled.
She wants to love and be loved, to touch and be touched,
Promises never to leave the hand that she fondly clutched.

Standing on the crossroads of childhood and puberty,
She seeks a soul mate, not one who is always flirty.
She feels lonely at home, even in a crowd, or among peers,
Unless with her soul mate who keeps count of her fallen tears.

Promises everything that her soul mate wants her to be,
She herself also demands promises on matters flimsy.
Not realizing that promises are easy to make but difficult to keep,
Broken promises are hard to bear with, easy to make one weep.

Sometimes the lass' love remain held back and suppressed,
When she is wary that her emotions will not be addressed.
Flames of this unexpressed love burn her in slow motion
Whenever she muses over some missed conversation.

Lucky is he who wins the first love of a lass, in solemn trust
Pity on him who misses the offer, or throws it into the dust.
When a life's journey is begun hand in hand with no suspicion,
The two unsuspecting souls will no doubt reach their destination.

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Poem Submitted: Friday, July 26, 2013
Poem Edited: Tuesday, March 11, 2014

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Poet's Notes about The Poem

Dedicated to all the young lovers, in whose pristine minds love reigns supreme!

Dhaka
26 July 2013
Copyright Reserved.

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  • Varsha MVarsha M (11/17/2020 8:06:00 PM)

    Sir this is really beautiful. Not just upsurge of hormones but a sound wise guiding light.

    Lucky is he who wins the first love of a lass, in solemn trust
    Pity on him who misses the offer, or throws it into the dust.
    When a life's journey is begun hand in hand with no suspicion,
    The two unsuspecting souls will no doubt reach their destination.....these lines really remind me how such good advises are important to every young lad to make wise choice.

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  • Rose Marie Juan-austinRose Marie Juan-austin (11/3/2020 6:31:00 PM)

    Liked the opening lines of the poem.
    Powerful lines that describe what pristine
    love is with great images.
    The ultimate stanza
    contains insightful lines, an apt ending
    for this beautiful poem.
    Five Stars!
    To my Poem List.

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:58:00 AM)

    @Rose Marie Juan-austin,
    Much obliged, much inspired by your thoughtful comment and the high rating accorded to my humble poem.
    Eve grateful for picking the poem to your 'MyPoem' basket.
    My heartfelt greetings and the very best wishes, Rose!

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  • Rose Marie Juan-austinRose Marie Juan-austin (11/3/2020 6:26:00 PM)

    A poem that many of us could relate,
    arrest a reader's mind delivering him into
    the realm of the wonders of youth's love.
    The beautiful thoughts embodied in this
    marvelous write slowly resonate bringing
    into one's mind beautiful memories of
    yesteryears.

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:26:00 AM)

    @Rose Marie Juan-austin,
    'The beautiful thoughts embodied in this
    marvelous write slowly resonate bringing
    into one's mind beautiful memories of
    yesteryears.' - I am so delighted to have these kind words Rose, the honour keeps resonating in my ears! Thank you so very much!

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  • Rose Marie Juan-austinRose Marie Juan-austin (11/3/2020 6:19:00 PM)

    A wonderful and insightful poem so beautifully
    crafted and well executed.
    It expresses in brilliant and beautiful detail the
    wonders, innocence and unfettered love of
    an adolescent.
    Vividly depicted with nice rhyme and rythym.

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:23:00 AM)

    Dear Poet Rose Marie Juan-austin,
    Grateful for your detailed observation and thoughtful comments, which I have observed, you usually make on other poets' woks. Thank you for this grace and care you accord to fellow poets' works, me certainly included.

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  • Anais VionetAnais Vionet (11/3/2020 12:56:00 PM)

    I liked this it shows a pretty good awareness of how romance feels at that age.
    I chucked at " Pity on him who misses the offer" , YEAH! You tell 'em! !
    Nice =]

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:19:00 AM)

    @Anais Vionet,
    Thanks for visiting my page on request. Shall be glad to have you visit again.

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  • Me Poet Yeps PoetMe Poet Yeps Poet (10/24/2020 5:12:00 PM)

    No love is as overwhelming and as pristine,
    As the maiden love of a lass, say of

    your poem makes my eyes recall the first one i loved but cold never touch so much of hull chall dillrehta tha mucchul abh kaya hahein hum those days have gone i sadly could not hold her hand she kissed my eyes then flew like an unchallenged butterfly o how i loved her but so many came and went heaven sent but one had the kind of scent the first love did sind times now end...

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:17:00 AM)

    Me Poet Yeps Poet,
    'so many came and went'- The first is the first, no matter how many may come and go later on.
    Thanks for visiting my page and sharing your thoughts and experience in the comment.

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  • Quoth TheravenQuoth Theraven (10/17/2020 12:50:00 AM)

    The youth, the love, in time and amid the crowd. Hand held, heart knelled, same as mine.
    QtR

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:09:00 AM)

    Dear Poet Quoth Theraven,
    Thanks for sharing your thoughts and experience. Glad that you've read the poem and related yourself to the emotions expressed.

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  • Robert Murray SmithRobert Murray Smith (10/10/2020 12:28:00 AM)

    A very insightful poem. Thinking back to my first love, I see a reflection in this beautifully crafted write.

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:07:00 AM)

    @Robert Murray Smith,
    Thanks for visiting my page and leaving a comment on this poem again. I am much inspired by your appreciative comment.

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  • Suresh Kumar EkSuresh Kumar Ek (9/30/2020 5:09:00 AM)

    The psychology of love
    At sixteen is poetically
    Exposed,
    Beautiful

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:04:00 AM)

    @Suresh Kumar Ek,
    Thank you for your beautiful, thoughtful comment. Much inspired.

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  • East Sea Fairy East Sea Fairy (9/29/2020 7:24:00 AM)

    No love is as overwhelming and as pristine,
    As the maiden love of a lass, say of sixteen. the wonder of youth love. nice poem

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    Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan(11/14/2020 12:02:00 AM)

    @East Sea Fairy East Sea Fairy,
    Thank you very much for visiting my page and appreciating the poem. Loved your comment.

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  • Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan (8/29/2020 12:39:00 PM)

    @D Loveday Morris,
    I am delighted to know that you 'enjoyed the innocence and youthfulness conveyed' through the poem. That's an inspiration for me, thank you.

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  • D Loveday MorrisD Loveday Morris (8/27/2020 6:47:00 AM)

    This is so delicately and thoughtfully written. I enjoyed the innocence and youthfulness conveyed. Beautiful.

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  • D Loveday MorrisD Loveday Morris (8/27/2020 6:46:00 AM)

    This is so delicately and thoughtfully written. I enjoy the innocence and youthfulness conveyed. Beautiful.

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  • Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan (8/26/2020 10:30:00 PM)

    @Robert Murray Smith,
    Thanks for your reading. Much inspired by your positive comment.

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  • Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan (8/26/2020 10:28:00 PM)

    @Aarzoo Mehek,
    Well said: 'Love is for keeps never mess up with hearts'!
    Loved your comment. Hope, you'll visit some of my poems again!

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  • Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan (8/26/2020 10:14:00 PM)

    @Kumarmani Mahakul,
    Thanks a lot for your historic '40101st comment'.
    'Time passes but memory of love rises like sunrise' - I very much appreciate this beautiful line from your thoughtful comment.

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  • Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan (8/26/2020 9:33:00 PM)

    Dear Poet Sarah Persson,
    Thanks for appreciating an old poem of mine. I am glad that the poem caught your attention and you grasped it so well.
    Am much inspired by your comment, Sarah.
    Just read your excellent poem, 'Purity With Release'. Loved it.

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  • Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan (8/26/2020 1:00:00 PM)

    @Me Poet Yeps Poet, Thanks for reading the poem and leaving a comment here.

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  • Aarzoo MehekAarzoo Mehek (6/22/2020 6:40:00 AM)

    beautifully expressed. love is for keeps never mess up with hearts.

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  • Kumarmani MahakulKumarmani Mahakul (5/17/2020 5:28:00 AM)

    Promises are kept in love. Emotion is felt in love. We live in love and we die in love. Standing on the crossroads we visualize the childhood and youth. Time passes but memory of love rises like sunrise. We are lucky having trust on God. a life's journey is begun hand in hand by God's grace and direction. This is my historic 40101st comment. (My historic Forty thousands one hundred and first comment)

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