pink petals cascade
from the very leafy tree
when time turns its wheels.
Inevitable change, Petals falling- Great Imagery, Leafy tree - Perfect for season and Time wheel - Fabulous.
Punch line is 'when time turns its wheels.' Very well written.
And thus life moves on, people come and go, trees grow and fall, water evaporate and fall again...
In this tiny capsule, you have captured the essence of changes that occur in passage of time. How the green leaves could turn pink and be shed by the tree, is also indicated, apart from how the flowers wither..Nice poem.5 *s
An amazing Spring Senryu 5 Stars full score. A oprecious theme: Change.
Amazing imagery and feeling in this! .. Filled with such breathtaking beauty! .. Definite 5 Stars! ...++++++
SO BEAUTIFUL SENYRU DR M A N YEAH UR FAN PPME OUT OF PH SCENE
Wow Asim ji! Fascinating Senryu! When time turns its wheels. pink petals cascade down......10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
This senryu is filled with images.