Brian Patten

(7 February 1946 / Liverpool / England)

Simple Lyric

Poem by Brian Patten

When I think of her sparkling face
And of her body that rocked this way and that,
When I think of her laughter,
Her jubilance that filled me,
It’s a wonder I’m not gone mad.

She is away and I cannot do what I want.
Other faces pale when I get close.
She is away and I cannot breathe her in.

The space her leaving has created
I have attempted to fill
With bodies that numbed upon touching,
Among them I expected her opposite,
And found only forgeries.

Her wholeness I know to be a fiction of my making,
Still I cannot dismiss the longing for her;
It is a craving for sensation new flesh
Cannot wholly calm or cancel,
It is perhaps for more than her.

At night above the parks the stars are swarming.
The streets are thick with nostalgia;
I move through senseless routine and insensitive chatter
As if her going did not matter.
She is away and I cannot breathe her in.
I am ill simply through wanting her.


Comments about Simple Lyric by Brian Patten

  • Dr Tony BrahminDr Tony Brahmin (2/2/2020 12:47:00 PM)

    Her wholeness I know to be a fiction of my making,
    Still I cannot dismiss the longing for her;
    It is a craving for sensation new flesh. The sense of wanting. tony(Report)Reply

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  • Mahtab BangaleeMahtab Bangalee (12/14/2019 9:46:00 PM)

    Simple lyrics
    for her
    for the love
    for the sparkling of love
    for the dazzling sophisticated love
    now become distinguished loving lyrics

    Simple lyrics
    for her
    for her beauty
    for her paragon of gracefulness
    now become extraordinary poem(Report)Reply

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  • Carlos Echeverria (12/14/2019 7:54:00 PM)

    He's sharing feelings I hope we all could relate to, but instead of singing " I got it bad and that ain't good, " he provides a pleasant read.(Report)Reply

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  • Rajnish MangaRajnish Manga (12/14/2019 9:25:00 AM)

    The space her leaving has created
    I have attempted to fill
    And found only forgeries... //.... Outstanding poem of love and longing with sweetness of a beautiful song. Thanks.(Report)Reply

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  • moews (6/6/2019 10:24:00 AM)

    Someone help me im dieing slowly and painfully(Report)Reply

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  • Karl Marx (2/21/2019 12:30:00 PM)

    Hi guys it's me Karl Marx(Report)Reply

    also, also karl max(4/28/2019 9:36:00 AM)

    Dude me too

    also, also karl max(4/28/2019 9:35:00 AM)

    dude same!

    Also Karl Marx(2/21/2019 12:31:00 PM)

    Dude same.

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  • slave (10/5/2018 2:35:00 PM)

    bad
    it didn't show the true things in life such as sorry depression happiness and anger




    ,(Report)Reply

    Also Karl Marx(4/13/2020 10:08:00 AM)

    lol nerd haha

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  • Brendz (6/20/2018 9:00:00 PM)

    I can always use these poems as guides for my teachings of Literature(Report)Reply

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  • Prentis Steffen (3/22/2018 11:04:00 AM)

    🤯👍👍👍👍it’s good I love it.(Report)Reply

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  • vanessa cumbe (2/12/2018 3:34:00 AM)

    This are very good poems they have away of relating with our everyday life(Report)Reply

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  • vanessa cumbe (2/12/2018 3:34:00 AM)

    This are very good poems they have away of relating with our everyday life(Report)Reply

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  • Jekami (1/29/2018 8:25:00 PM)

    I love this. Simple and interesting(Report)Reply

    BOBBBYBYBY(2/13/2018 10:51:00 AM)

    LOL TIS POEM IS GOOD XDDDDDD

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  • Bernard F. AsuncionBernard F. Asuncion (11/17/2016 5:35:00 PM)

    What a lovely poem... Nice! ! !
    Thanks for sharing....(Report)Reply

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  • Marieta MaglasMarieta Maglas (11/17/2016 3:09:00 PM)

    ''Her wholeness I know to be a fiction of my making, ''.- it's about the spiritual part of this woman that should exist inside him. This part is a fiction. ''She is away and I cannot breathe her in.'' Moreover, he really needs to create the ideal woman inside him. For this purpose, he needs the opposite.''Among them I expected her opposite, /
    And found only forgeries.'' But maybe this woman can make him feel complete.''It is perhaps for more than her.'' He uses the word 'perhaps'.- wonderful poem- voted 10(Report)Reply

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  • Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/17/2016 11:31:00 AM)

    A crafty poem on love and passion, i liked it.
    At night above the parks the stars are swarming.
    The streets are thick with nostalgia;
    I move through senseless routine and insensitive chatter
    As if her going did not matter.(Report)Reply

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  • Savita TyagiSavita Tyagi (11/17/2016 8:20:00 AM)

    Love and its fever is intense here. Very passionate expressions. Thanks for sharing.(Report)Reply

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  • Rajnish MangaRajnish Manga (11/17/2016 7:57:00 AM)

    Her jubilance that filled me,
    It’s a wonder I’m not gone mad.
    I am ill simply through wanting her.... / Lovely expression of feelings of a lover towards his lady love. Beautifully crafted poem. Thanks for sharing.(Report)Reply

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  • Indira RenganathanIndira Renganathan (11/17/2016 4:06:00 AM)

    A pure love poem out from a true heart- 10(Report)Reply

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  • Edward Kofi LouisEdward Kofi Louis (11/17/2016 1:26:00 AM)

    Her wholeness. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.(Report)Reply

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  • Sally Plumb Plumb (1/22/2011 8:06:00 AM)

    This piece is so very lovely... it reminds me of Pablo Neruda(Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, January 3, 2003