Simple Lyric Poem by Brian Patten

Simple Lyric

Rating: 3.6


When I think of her sparkling face
And of her body that rocked this way and that,
When I think of her laughter,
Her jubilance that filled me,
It’s a wonder I’m not gone mad.

She is away and I cannot do what I want.
Other faces pale when I get close.
She is away and I cannot breathe her in.

The space her leaving has created
I have attempted to fill
With bodies that numbed upon touching,
Among them I expected her opposite,
And found only forgeries.

Her wholeness I know to be a fiction of my making,
Still I cannot dismiss the longing for her;
It is a craving for sensation new flesh
Cannot wholly calm or cancel,
It is perhaps for more than her.

At night above the parks the stars are swarming.
The streets are thick with nostalgia;
I move through senseless routine and insensitive chatter
As if her going did not matter.
She is away and I cannot breathe her in.
I am ill simply through wanting her.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sally Plumb Plumb 22 January 2011

This piece is so very lovely... it reminds me of Pablo Neruda

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Bernard F. Asuncion 17 November 2016

What a lovely poem... Nice! ! ! Thanks for sharing....

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Marieta Maglas 17 November 2016

''Her wholeness I know to be a fiction of my making, ''.- it's about the spiritual part of this woman that should exist inside him. This part is a fiction. ''She is away and I cannot breathe her in.'' Moreover, he really needs to create the ideal woman inside him. For this purpose, he needs the opposite.''Among them I expected her opposite, / And found only forgeries.'' But maybe this woman can make him feel complete.''It is perhaps for more than her.'' He uses the word 'perhaps'.- wonderful poem- voted 10

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M Asim Nehal 17 November 2016

A crafty poem on love and passion, i liked it. At night above the parks the stars are swarming. The streets are thick with nostalgia; I move through senseless routine and insensitive chatter As if her going did not matter.

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Anna Russell 25 November 2006

Possibly the best poem ever written about having a broken heart. Hugs Anna xxx

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Samson paia 26 July 2022

love this poem

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Dr Antony Theodore 02 February 2020

Her wholeness I know to be a fiction of my making, Still I cannot dismiss the longing for her; It is a craving for sensation new flesh. The sense of wanting. tony

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Mahtab Bangalee 14 December 2019

Simple lyrics for her for the love for the sparkling of love for the dazzling sophisticated love now become distinguished loving lyrics Simple lyrics for her for her beauty for her paragon of gracefulness now become extraordinary poem

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Carlos Echeverria 14 December 2019

He's sharing feelings I hope we all could relate to, but instead of singing " I got it bad and that ain't good, " he provides a pleasant read.

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Rajnish Manga 14 December 2019

The space her leaving has created I have attempted to fill And found only forgeries... //.... Outstanding poem of love and longing with sweetness of a beautiful song. Thanks.

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Brian Patten

Brian Patten

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