MS. NIVEDITA BAGCHI SPC. UK.


~ Sousedouse Dipdouse ~ - Poem by MS. NIVEDITA BAGCHI SPC. UK.

Humble submission:

[Rabindranath Tagore (RNT) at old age wrote many romantic poems / songs on Ashrama Balika [hermitage girls] …here I’ve made a paradigm shift…

In UK I watch at ‘closeangle’ the voidness of many retired widowmen …they’ve pension and other amenities…but voidness in mind…eagering heart to get solace…psychic… from someone… and my empathic sharing … it led me to portray this poem ~ niv]




~ SOUSEDOUSE DIPDOUSE ~

Ms. Nivedita
UK
December 21,2009.

In your twilightage
Lay heart for caresses
Discover fluffy edge
Glide with my psychic sledge.

Age no bar,
Stupid number
I fie phew blunt blunder.

My risingsun age
‘Keep no haze’
Discover my crazeamaze.

Why otiose frown
Hey beau Hon
Cuddle nuzzle
Why fumble
In me be nimble.

Lay pink bosoms’ carpets
Listen love euphony
Snuggles n’ gyrates.

Dame Jane is not
Will-o’-the-wisp
But red nip
Sip n’ sozzled n’ sip.

No go not
Close n’ abut
Knit love knot.

Sky seeking sleep
O’ John race heart’s beep
Just a buss in silence
Eurekaize my elegance.

Your adrenalite agitated inn
Soothe in my emotive endorphin.

Come in hey John
Jane waiting in bedecks
Marvel aqua mansion
Sousedouse dipdowse
Bask doting physiquedawn.

Dame Jane is morning roses
For twilightage John
E’er nears n’ closes.

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Comments about ~ Sousedouse Dipdouse ~ by MS. NIVEDITA BAGCHI SPC. UK.

  • May Witwit (7/14/2010 4:39:00 PM)


    Lovely...I hope you will be famous
    May
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  • (7/7/2010 2:32:00 PM)


    'Age is only a number'.... how many believe that? i wish everyone did! made lives easier. IS old age a curse? a seizure of openess, surrender to isolation...away on a pilgrimage, years spent with irritated family members sans eyes... ears or locked up in a shell created by self! ....should one die before dying? ......a social cause dealt brilliantly, supported by urgent intellect and guarded by best possible emotions. One can visualize one's future...only zest would suffice.10+ (Report) Reply

  • (6/14/2010 9:19:00 AM)


    Nivedita You are an exquisite weaver of words.The comments on your poems get me closer to their meaning.But I would someday write a poem like yours and present it to you. Continue surprising us with your enigmaticmagnetic esoteric poetry. (Report) Reply

  • (6/8/2010 3:43:00 AM)


    ‘SOUSEDOUSE DIPDOUSE’ nice word coupling … styling-titling

    Appeal is just and help is must…thanks Poet for such gesture

    We find for oldies poet delved deep into their inside ….of there solitariness and old age voidness ….straight appeal, ‘Eurekaize my elegance’ Wow! !


    Dame Jane is morning roses/For twilightage John/E’er nears n’ closes….words of great assurance …thanks
    10+
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  • (5/24/2010 1:20:00 PM)


    It was a poem that was very hard for me to understand, but after reading it twice it began to come across. Thanks for the invite niv a good poem. Lynn (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2010 2:53:00 PM)


    ‘…Your adrenalite agitated inn/Soothe in my emotive endorphin…’

    Adrenaline is sympathomimatic and Endorphin [brains own luller]

    Poet’s observation on widowmen is very right….psychic voidness they suffer from…

    And very romantically young damsel leniently as extra bonanza loved to share romance to fill the voidness

    Indeed a paradigm shift
    10+++
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  • (4/12/2010 1:46:00 PM)


    It is very touchy poem…recent news accounts for that ~

    Celeb Liz Taylor [late seventies on wheel chair] for 9th time going to marry a man in late forties…what poet anticipated and in celebs it is common…

    And common in commons too …her eyes are very penetrating and heart is very feeling

    Excellent poem thanks Ma’am

    10+++
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  • (1/21/2010 1:20:00 PM)


    The poet is inteligent, bold and honest in thoughts.Romantic or love or erotic poem, whatever we may treat this poem, it is a poem, nicely written, very thoughtful, indeed.it leads us to the basic human nature. Nothing is impossible in this world.Sometimes, we think something impossible because of our lack of experiences & knowledge, man knows very little about the life and its values, its limitless possibilities..A poet is the person, who is in search of the never ending process of the life.The language of the poem is somewhat cryptic, not poetically smooth, I feel but I have got a great experience.Ten ++ # I must add some thing regarding 'Humble submission' of this poem. It is not at all proper to tell that RNT wrote some love poems/songs during his old age for' Ashram Balika' Tabindranath wrote thousands of love poems, songs during his entire life.his first book of poems was published at the age of 21. and 20 years, even whole life time is not enough for understanding of his poems or writings, I dare to tell. I am afraid, submission part is not necesary for this poem. A poem needs no introduction for understanding of the same in any way.Inspite of this, I have enjoyed the poem. (Report) Reply

  • (1/9/2010 9:51:00 AM)


    Finest love poem with twilightage and risingsun age well blended and in romantic flavor…

    Poetically not ‘mismatched’…in reality…?
    Definite 10+
    Dr. V.

    PS Note Humble Submission...and it is the 'The spot' of the poem...
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  • Prince Obed de la Cruz (1/2/2010 7:50:00 AM)


    i rated this one positive ten! (Report) Reply

  • (12/28/2009 10:42:00 AM)


    ‘Young Jane laid fullheart
    Without any if and but
    Straight and curt
    For old John a fresh start.

    What I understood about the Poem and empathicoromantic [empathic + romantic] Poem it is… enjoyed it to the lees
    10++
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  • (12/28/2009 10:14:00 AM)


    Like fairytale … offbeat romance …may come true in numbers some day...

    ‘…Dame Jane is not // Will-o’-the-wisp // But red nip // Sip n’ sozzled n’ sip…’

    Wonderful lines… gritty and palpable…
    10+++
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  • (12/28/2009 9:58:00 AM)


    An old adage ‘a kick of wench is better than embrace of golden ager’ LOL! …

    Here we find reverse swing…Dame Jane swimming against the current…BOLD conception…Daring…

    But the 'Submission' is worth contemplating…

    Who can Sousedouse Dipdouse…? Hey young Dames are you listening? Come forward and be trendsetter.
    10+++
    AB
    London
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  • (12/23/2009 12:25:00 AM)


    Wonderful write dear writer, Like a symphony of old piano, it can called carol of sentiment, but it is original vision to hurt our hearts, and to force to thing our brains,10+ (Report) Reply

  • (12/22/2009 3:01:00 AM)


    Well I read the poem and comment by John…
    I say it is not an erotic poem…and his name is incidental…LOL!

    In the ‘Humble Submission poet niv…explicitly mentioned the voidness of widowmen in UK…what as an Indian she is awe struck…as her values [family / social] are different…she is very frank and close observer… well at crossroad poet has put the UK people…how to solve this voidness….here romanticism used as poetic expression…just a suggestion…but other avenues are there to contemplate upon..
    Thanks for such empathic vision…for the ‘trunk-root’ of the society….the widowmen are…
    Ten+++
    dr.sakti
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  • John Knight (12/21/2009 11:36:00 AM)


    Hi NIV - I am honoured to read this beautiful emotive Love Poem and write a comment - especially as my name is John and a very favoured John features in verses 8,10,11. I score it a worthy ten - on every count. To me the poem is an entreaty and an invitation - to those beyond a certain age - to still be prepared to explore the delights of love with a younger partner. There are mentions Twilightage (> 70?) 'Age no bar' 'O'John race heart beat' (The luck of the Irish LOL) and 'Twilightage John' and the Lady is 'Rising Sun age - 20 to 30 perhaps. The invite is quite specific to enjoy the delights of Jane's young and virile body - The language is cryptic Fluffy edge - Crazeamaze - Pink bosoms carpet - red nip - Eurekaise my elegance (I love that one) - sooth in my emotive endorphin (I wish I had written that line) - Sousedouse - dipdouse (this is full-on) etc but the nuances are crystal clear - this is the great art of emotive poetry - well don agin NIV you are awesome. To call this poem erotiic would be an understatement. Love you in Poetry - JOHN X X X (Report) Reply

  • (12/21/2009 9:36:00 AM)


    niv this is beautiful words flow 10 (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, December 21, 2009

Poem Edited: Thursday, February 25, 2010


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