Special Poem by Deborah Cromer

Special

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A lover you are with an amazing style to care
Your skin is magic, a dream come true, so sexy when bare
I loved your heartbeat in ecstasy, pounding with pleasure
Making love with you was an endless, complete giving treasure

Bodies wet with sweat, you would just give me more
Lil' bit, lil' bit, lots-was always impossible to ignore
Giving to me all you had and then having even more to give
Filling me with your passion, giving me more reason to live

Together our lives were special and we were only as one
We spent all we had on being with each other and getting things done
You joined me in my world to make it a better place
You and I we fit together, you the leather and me the lace

So different from each other, it was easier for us to get along
You were the music fitting with me perfectly and I was the song
You became the piece of paper, I had life of pen and ink
I became the kiss and you baby, the welcoming, sexy wink

You and I, me and you, us together we were so good
We needed each other, you the fire and me the wood
One without the other of so many things make them not go
It takes two to tango, something everyone must know

Me without you is not working out, I am not complete
I am playing the music, but now missing the beat
Life is not normal without you, I miss you too damn much
I need your love in my life, I need your magic touch

Without you, my days are just a waste of everyone's time
If I do not see you soon, I will have the words, but without the rhyme

Monday, November 9, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: love
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Knight 10 November 2009

Hi Debbie - You are an excellent poet in terms of Structure - each verse a perfect quatrain - Rhyme an aabb ccdd etc pattern throughout - Rhythm it flows like a Mountain Stream! I am a classical poet and this is a classical poem - I give it TEN for structure. Love you in Poetry JOHN.

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Caitlin Walczyk 09 November 2009

Very good. I enjoyed your sense of rhythm and comparisons. The only thing I would suggest is using stanzas in this to separate it a bit more. Very good poem.

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James Mclain 09 November 2009

i must come back.. too read more words... and find the time too rhyme and fly as too one bird...iip

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Deborah Cromer

Deborah Cromer

Portland, Oregon
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