Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 7,002 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Storm - Poem by Valerie Dohren

Dark clouds gathering
rain beating down, swirling,
thunder roaring
lightning flashing
crackling down to earth

Electrified air -

- turning into malevolent eyes
Shock - gasping for breath

Comments about Storm by Valerie Dohren

  • Meena Mustafa (7/3/2012 9:39:00 PM)

    We just had a storm in Virginia and this was a perfect read :) Lol.... (Report) Reply

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  • (6/30/2012 6:39:00 AM)

    I could feel the gasping and breathlessness (Report) Reply

  • (4/9/2012 12:25:00 AM)

    Storms are not my favorite thing, but your poem recreates them quite well. Makes me quiver. Good job. (Report) Reply

  • (3/14/2012 9:03:00 PM)

    Sometimes a storm does feel malevolent; and the thunder seems to know your name- and the
    lightning, where you are hiding from it! Lovely verse.
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  • (3/9/2012 5:01:00 PM)

    Succinct and descriptive. The shock part reminds me of how brief and ferocious some storms can be. The other shock thing is when a thunder clap seems to boom above your home. (Report) Reply

  • (3/9/2012 2:35:00 PM)

    Now this is what I call prose at its best and you, my friend are magnificent at both prose AND poetry. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, March 9, 2012

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