Take My Life Poem by Rohan Nambiar
Take My Life
Alone Alone in my heart
Dwells a sense of huskness
Come to me my pretty lady
With a whisp of love
No friends and meaning in life
I am alone in walks of life
Relatives think I am useless
Have teased every now and then
Blamed me for what I haven't done
Better Lord knows every thing
He is the one I really trust
Nothing given to my father & mother
How can I commit suicide?
Prevailed darkness in air
Motivate me to take my life
A sound of dead bells
Knows the thither and whither
Its time to say good bye
The thoughts of me still alive
Will remain in your hearts
Alone Alone in my heart
Dwells a sense of huskness
Come to me my pretty lady
With a whisp of love
This is absolutely your best work. You really show a promise of talent here that I could ony glimpse before. This is excellent writing. Pour your lonely thoughts onto the page and they will free you from their actions. Write and your lonely thoughts of death upon the page and they will take flight and leave you with smiles, pride and a strengthed talent. Write every day and you will be a writer. There is nothing better. Excellent, may God bless you.10+
Very poignant. I hope that the lady of your dreams responded. Strength for the journey, my poet friend. Warm regards, Sandra
this is ur best poem! its really good. but ur true love will find u when ur ready for her. and dont let other people control ur life. ur life is in ur hands, not theirs. stay strong, and if u ever need someone to talk to, i'm here. =)
this is an amazing poem that needs to be shared with the world!
Those frustrations in youth are very common. Wait for a moment with hope. Hope is the spark that lights the whole life. very well expressed pain and frustsration. sathya narayana
this is good write of verses...but Lord should be capital letter at the start... keep on writing and edit your verses...
This is a fine piece of writing and I recommend it to the reader. You used repetition well and constructed the poem with skill. Your word selection was good. It was not too long as some tend to make them so. Time well spent. A keeper. GW62
hey rohan, excellent choice of words--hope yur pretty lady has responded. keep up yur gud work -u will be a great poet regards anju
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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12/5/2025 7:42:48 AM # 1.0.0
great strength and wording. nice work, hopefully alone you may see that you are not alone. excellent write, you take the words and make them flow, yet every emotion is portrayed silently, like a whisper, just waiting to be heard and understood. excellent job.