Scotty Dogg

Rookie - 183 Points (Don't rightly remember. They always called me Dogg / The Potato Fields, Indiana)

The Bad Poem - Poem by Scotty Dogg

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We'll lash you up foul poem,
And bind you in three knots.
We'll twist you till your stars
Won't shine, and
Your roses start to rot.

We'll burrow out a tiny hole
And plant you in the clay.
We'll put a muzzle on
Your moans so
Your whimpers fade away.

Topic(s) of this poem: fashion


Comments about The Bad Poem by Scotty Dogg

  • William F. Dougherty (10/17/2015 11:36:00 AM)


    Think about making I'll and we'll and pronoun agreement.
    Does muzzling moans produce whispers, or would whimpers
    be a better fit.

    Doc
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    Scotty Dogg Scotty Dogg (10/17/2015 1:14:00 PM)

    I like the suggestions. Will change. Thanks for reading!

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  • Valsa George (12/15/2013 2:29:00 AM)


    Don't strangle and stifle it to death! Let it breathe, so that it might please someone! Very interesting!

    I have never sung the dirge of any poem! However bad it is, I see that it survives! !
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  • Kanav Justa (10/29/2013 2:14:00 PM)


    haha, , , , i have got so many of them, , , would need your help... to burry them, , , (Report) Reply

  • Laughing@ You (10/25/2013 12:50:00 PM)


    SD, this is very funny and light. Reminds of the late, great Herbert Nehrlich's work (and trust me, that is a compliment; he was a master rhymer!) . (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards (10/12/2013 3:13:00 PM)


    i KNEW this sounded familiar! who can remember all that has happened in the last three months? and i still like this....a lot. ya know, i used to write 'til for until, until i found that till is proper. your poem has 'till. i think that is a hybrid. (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards (7/31/2013 4:24:00 PM)


    which one of mine WAS it? now that i have read it again, i notice you haven't done all that YET. or have you by now? or are you just a lot of hot air? you are really a pussy cat, not a dogg, right? and you wouldn't REALLY harm a poor little poem. to quote Sandy Player, below, Poor thing; it ain't it's fault. (Report) Reply

  • Aria Siren (5/28/2013 10:44:00 AM)


    All of the sudden the poems in my graveyard started screaming at me. I better add another thick layer of cement over their gaping mouths. (Report) Reply

  • Sandy Player (12/31/2012 5:33:00 PM)


    We can feel your abuse of the bad poem as we read. Poor thing; it ain't it's fault. Ahhhhhh! I admit! The blame goes to me! ! ! Woe and more woe... (Report) Reply

  • Valerie Dohren (12/27/2012 2:28:00 PM)


    Oh dear, poor poem - hope none of mine are that bad, but who knows....... Good one Scotty. (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul (12/26/2012 1:14:00 PM)


    The rhythm really fun to come out from mouth after reading this, what i know this is not the bad poem...not bad poem_Soul (Report) Reply

  • (12/20/2012 9:38:00 AM)


    Two different notes! the first stanza is better and the second speaks about the universal drama! what a 'bad' poem! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, December 20, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, October 17, 2015


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