The Things You Took From Me

Rating: 4.9

A mind filled with every knowledge of you
My heart pounds at your nearness
I breath you in and exhale your perfume
Eyes that shine with your returned stare of knowing
Hair brushing your face in loving tenderness
Lips grazing lips, curling up into mischievous smiles
Arms wrapping your parts to mine
Fingers testing the flesh of your body
Nails bitten in anticipation
Breasts that only your hands command
Stomach that aches for your fullness
Legs entwining with yours, keeping you close
Feet to run wherever you go
Are of no use now.
My mind dies with every thought of you
My heart, you tore out and never gave back
Eyes that will never shine again
Hair that is lax and dull
Lips cracked and painfully sore
Arms have lost their will
Fingers are for working… there is no pleasure anymore
Nails are of no consequence
What do I care what they look like now
Breasts are for the nourishment of children
Oh, but what a sight they used to be
My stomach is always empty, nothing satiates
Legs enable me to walk, but back to what I do not know
Feet that take me nowhere I want to go
Now you’re gone
And you took me with you, only I’m standing right here

James B. Earley 03 July 2008

A passionate writ of instrospection! My best to you......

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Tears In Rain 07 September 2005

I a disagree with Raynette (frequently, and again) on this one. I love the contrast of the first 'stanza' with the second. The disembodiment all the way down to the Nails is riveting. I would say 'are' instead of 'I'm' in some places, and OK I agree with Raynette on one point. No need to say 'without you I'm nothing'. Sorry to meedle so much, but this was my favorite so far of yours.

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Gillian.E. Shaw 28 June 2005

It's so femail. You write for all broken hearted women. Beautiful.

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Sallie Howson 22 June 2005

i enjoyed it..thank u

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