Yes. Yes. Yes I can. Yes we can.
Yes t is possible. Yes and yes …and yes.
No. No. Not possible. None. Never. We'll not.
Nothing. Nowhere. No and no…and no.
This was my writing in the competition.
They declared me as disqualified. They told
Me that I had to give a long ‘SPACE' between
The stanzas of ‘YES' and ‘NO'.
The up and down of life! Facing discriminations here and there. However, stand firm and, don't give up on your dreams in life. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
They declared me as disqualified. They told Me that I had to give a long ‘SPACE' between The stanzas of ‘YES' and ‘NO'. - - - - - -A very meaningful and thought provoking poem.There are some people who discard us because we can not say yes to what they ask us to agree.When we can not make that compromise on our principle, or we can not tolerate that gap between our words and action(SPACE) , they scorn us and declare us unfit. Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem.
Now this was a very sly poem! I think we would be making a huge mistake if we just took this poet at face value. He's working underground, he's going behind the lines, he is the master of surprise. Very good expose of compromise in society. I am definitely sold on him. 10++++++++++++++++++++++++++
susan Manny thanks for your sublime comment....this kind of critical evaluation along with inspiring words really increases the will to pen even when there is little idea and less enthusiasm........ your ghost poems I really love and like.......only a great poet of high feelings can present this kind of poems so spontaneously even in this 21st century of internet...........
Nurul no doubt this is an allegorical poem...You have skillfully presented a universal conflict in a simple style. Apparently words are arranged in a casual manner but repeated use of words is the strength of this poem.. Nice work indeed.. It is worthy more than 10... Thanks for sharing....
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
part of a previous comment by: Sriranji Aratisankar (8/31/2016 1: 08: 00 AM) : Nurul no doubt this is an allegorical poem..................no wonder i (Bri) don't quite understand the poem; or do i? ? no, not the first stanza. the second stanza seems straightforward: you entered some competition. were the writing topics compromise and survival? ? those are shown to be the topics of your PH poem i am commenting on. so, you wrote a four line poem and They declared you (as) disqualified aka expelled? ? from the competition? ? MEANIES! They were mean, UNLESS you DID break the rules of the competition, in which case you 'should have been' disqualified in my opinion. ================ **** (see below at ****) ==================== i'll read it again, as i've indicated to Nurul before today, i do not often use (or knowingly use anyway) OR recognize 'symbolism'; i think allegory is a type of symbolism. let me Google! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Allegory: [keeping in mind that Nurul does not say it is allegory]: al·le·go·ry ˈaləˌɡôrē/ noun noun: allegory; plural noun: allegories a story, poem, or picture that can be interpreted to reveal a hidden meaning, typically a moral or political one. Pilgrim's Progress is an allegory of the spiritual journey synonyms: parable, analogy, metaphor, symbol, emblem Saramago's latest novel is an allegory of social disintegration a symbol. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - aha! see? the Google-supplied definition for allegory says: a story, poem, or picture that can be interpreted to reveal a hidden meaning A HIDDEN MEANING! ! ! how can anyone expect Bri Edwards, college dropout and ex-postal worker, and 'failure' in three marriages! ! ..............to be able to find a hidden meaning! ! ! ! ? ? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Yes t is possible. Yes and yes …and yes................do you mean t is, OR do you mean what i might use: ................... 'tis or it is? ? i don't recognize t is. =================================================== ****so, now i've read your poem twice, as well as some or all of the comments. you seem very pleased with Bharati's comment. but i would never (in my present state of mind) say what she did, because i do not interpret symbolism, or i am not aware that i do [or at least i rarely do]. the four-line 'competition poem', the one that did not have a long SPACE between the yes lines and the no lines, sounds very playful to me and i kind of like it, BUT it does NOT mean anything in particular to me. bri ;) i really don't agree with any of the comments before mine. but, perhaps i am just not insightful enough? !