Zen Bojczuk

Rookie (Philadelphia, PA. USA)

To The Gym (Haiku) - Poem by Zen Bojczuk

I am way too fat.
Today I go to the gym,
Right after this cake.

Must lift some weights now.
Need more sugar energy,
One more candy bar.

Gym close to the pub
A few beers will help me through
Dehydration - bad

At the gym three times.
Should be Mister Universe.
Why am I still fat?


Comments about To The Gym (Haiku) by Zen Bojczuk

  • (3/7/2007 11:11:00 AM)


    Ah, Zen, this is good. So tongue in cheek, it really speaks to me. Yes, this has a perfect 5-5-5 count but is technically a senryu, not a haiku. The senryu takes the same syllable count but deals with the inner self, philosophical issues, etc., just as your poem does. Haiku must deal only with nature. I, too, did not realize that distinction until I joined World Of Poets.com and, after I posted way too many 'haikus' someone finally set me straight. I was so embarrassed!

    At any rate I like this one very much and your ending especially:

    'At the gym three times.
    Should be Mister Universe.
    Why am I still fat? '

    Indeed, why are we still fat? LOL

    alicia
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  • (3/1/2007 5:03:00 PM)


    Ah mid life ain't it grand...lol
    Great write Zen
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  • (3/1/2007 4:46:00 PM)


    I've got the same attitude to smoking - I figure if I drink a cup of greeen tea with every cigarette, it'll cancel out the bad stuff!
    I really liked this Zen, it made me smile.
    Hugs
    Anna xxx
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  • (3/1/2007 4:42:00 PM)


    A very good point, two extremes don't make a ballance, I suspect it applies to a few more things in life, Good write Zen, Zen, All the best David (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, March 1, 2007

Poem Edited: Tuesday, January 25, 2011


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