Troubled Walls Poem by Heather Burns

Troubled Walls

Rating: 3.8


Weathered walls began to yell
plaster from the ceiling fell

Crumbled walls began to cry
long after the paint was dry

These walls trembled and shook
no more water in the brook

Needing paint and repair
a comb ran through their hair

When your walls begin to shout
you'll know what I'm writing about.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
this poem is a metaphor. I have added personification. (human traits)
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Geetha Jayakumar 21 November 2013

Beautiful poem Heather. When wall begins to shout, its asking for care. Good write.

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Paul Brookes 20 November 2013

Loved this poem but I have to say my walls are sound but I'm saving every pound you never know when you'll hear the calls of your poor dilapidated walls On a serious note I guess its not just about walls (sorry about the terrible rhyme) BB: O)

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Stan Petrovich 19 November 2013

My walls say that extraordinary change is coming...our carbon signature is scribbled in black all over them and try as I may, I can do little to change the minds of the third world countries that are going bananas with their fossil fuels. The end is near.

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Noreen Carden 19 November 2013

Well done Heather i have a few of those walls myself great poem

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Tirupathi Chandrupatla 18 November 2013

Beautiful poem with nice rhythm. Mend them before they fall apart. Prevention is better than cure. Thank you.

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Phiwe Mbatha 01 December 2013

Great work Heather.

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Nader Baheri 29 November 2013

enjoyed it with flowing lines and rhythm.~nb

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Musfiq Us Shaleheen 28 November 2013

Beautiful poem Heather. When wall begins to shout, we will be with you... thanks for sharing...

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Clarence Prince 21 November 2013

If my walls should start shouting, I'll know it's time to add new paint! Well done, Heather!

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Heather Wilkins 21 November 2013

dear Poet friends, as we are in our holiday season in my country it finds everyone very busy. Thanksgiving next week then Christmas season begins. will not be on line as much as usual. But I will try to read anc comments as much as possibly. Happy Holiday season to everyone. Heather

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