Untrusted, Unveiled Poem by Nashy Lamen

Untrusted, Unveiled

Rating: 5.0


As I waver into the night sleep,
I can't help but think,
As I wander and blink,
As I wander so deep...

I thought of mistakes,
some I would regret,
And some that I did not
intentionally forget...

But this I thought of,
It was stumped in my head,
Was it all my fault?
All the pain he has shed? ..

Guilt trapped my mind,
As I choked out my pride,
With a sorry so soft,
I run back to hide...

Then silence broke,
And darkness prevailed,
Alone there I was,
Untrusted, unveiled...

I forged my own words,
so faux and so fake,
I tried to be careful,
with what drama I'd make..

I might make things worse,
if I blemish or slip,
With this burden I hold,
I blunder, I trip..

No options left here,
but to face it with fear,
Untrusted, Unveiled,
no statement was clear...

I tried to comprehend,
But it was no use,
Untrusted, unveiled,
No sense left to muse..

Wednesday, June 10, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: trapped
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Julia Pascual 20 August 2009

nice poem... greatly done.. strong dark emotions... but focus on positive things ok? ? =)

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Danzen D. 02 July 2009

If this were a dramatic monologue presented to a large audience, I believe you'd get a standing ovation. A great write..I think this one would become famous someday..thinking and dancing with the shadows, confusion and darkness..read the poem and you'll have nothing more to say. I look forward to more of your poems. -grins-

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 11 June 2009

A true contemplation seems to have been disturbed by some distressing act that has covered the senses with pelts of fear...........

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Eyan Desir 11 June 2009

Nice flow well writen

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Lorena Cruz 11 June 2009

nicely done.. but please don't stress your self too much..

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