Lyn Paul

Gold Star - 35,508 Points (17.03.1965 / Mt. Barker S.A)

Watching You Fall - Poem by Lyn Paul

Hurting so hard
My door is open
Your heart is not
Let me in
Your pain is spreading
It's threatening LIFE
It's GOT to STOP
Hard it may be
But so much harder
For those knocking
Just watching
Feeling Helpless
Only wanting to heal
The pain you are feeling
The pain
SO MANY feel
NO hope
Will always SHINE
YOU... just let it in


Copyright Reserved May 2014

Topic(s) of this poem: pain, hope

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Comments about Watching You Fall by Lyn Paul

  • Bri Edwards (2/15/2016 9:11:00 PM)

    easier said than done! :) (Report) Reply

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  • Dee Corpolongo (7/24/2013 9:17:00 AM)

    So very hard to watch a loved one fall....expressed perfectly here....with love.
    Excellent write, Lyn....and so strongly felt. Thank you....
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  • Heather Wilkins (7/8/2013 6:28:00 PM)

    so warm and compelling write. so hard to watch one fall. nice (Report) Reply

  • David Wood (7/8/2013 5:40:00 AM)

    I can feel the frustration you feel and the desire to help. A strong poem of hope Lyn. (Report) Reply

  • Shahzia Batool (7/7/2013 8:34:00 AM)

    The poem is Lyn Paul brand... so tender...the feeling heart and the open door... a selfless offer till the final upper-case earnest and humane! ! ! Nice Lyn! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • (7/4/2013 7:30:00 AM)

    A great plea to a suffering loved one, enclosed within their emotional shell. I hope you can break through. Love will find a way and the angst and frustration expressed here and the declaration of love in the heartfelt and palpable offering of counsel and succour will surely find a way with care, persistence and understanding. (Report) Reply

  • Ruby Honeytip (7/3/2013 7:01:00 AM)

    Oh Lyn....this is written so well. A heart wrenching piece....I love your work. Love Roobs xxx (Report) Reply

  • Jenie Franksay (7/2/2013 10:00:00 PM)

    touched................... very nice..........
    i invite you read and comment on my poems.
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  • Jenie Franksay (7/2/2013 9:59:00 PM)

    touched................... very nice..........
    i invite you read and comment on my poems.
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, July 2, 2013

Poem Edited: Wednesday, July 19, 2017

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