Huge waves approach us
Menacingly from the seas
Like a tsunami
Monsoons lash the door
Creating panic inside
Will the rain enter
The seas beckon him
Miles of clear deep blue waters
But he cannot swim
actually water can cause fear, whether we can swim or not.it can get realy fierce and so your poem is a very good depiction of that fierceness.
I am a swimmer and i love the sea, the water.Our ancestral home is near the sea. Better for the one who's afraid is to know how to swim and be acquainted..LOL. Lovely words..I love this
This is a delightful and well exressed senryu triplet, Sandra. In the third poem, the middle line has only six syllables-easily remedied by adding the word 'deep' like this: 'miles of clear deep blue waters.' Not only that, but the word deep gives that final line a bit more of an impact as well. Carl.
all three on water...nicely done sandra...i too am not a swimmer...the last very apt for me
Very good haikus in traditional format. Very meaningful and deep.
When huge waves like tsunami approach monsoons lash the heart creating panic...how then he dares to swim...beware of another tsunami..this piece is ambiguous and applicable to experiences in human life otherwise too...great thought..great wording..'water thoughts' is very different
Sandra, You gripped me with your water words. I feel water has a pull and a push of immense intensity. I like how you have made these into a triplet. The have been so skilfully written! 10 Karin Anderson
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A very clear concise poem, full of fear for the non-swimmer, great work Sandra, 10 Lynda xx