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! ! ! ! What Have We Become'...? ? ?

Rating: 3.6


So there are unfinished breakfasts
paths choked by acid of accusations
china stained grey by your bitter adieux

fish-scale of a cold stare
almost an ingrained ingredient
of many our gourmet meals

There are half finished sentences
barbs of whose alphabets herald
all virgin conversations and….

There are missed heartbeats
a grip of fear permanently situated
on the neck of unformed words

There are reasons for the dense forest
of absurdities; there is philosophy in the
mindless mire of our shared obstinacy

this love we once celebrated
If rediscovered: ravishing
vanishing: if unobserved

:) My gratitude to Wardha for giving a whole new meaning to this mangled, disparate and derelict assemblage of alphabets that I’d sent to her for tweaking. Thanks so much Dr Sahiba. Thanks to Francesca's Literature Teacher for inspiring it initially.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Indira Babbellapati 30 October 2008

this just suits my mood at the moment...tha'ts a good read, rehan...something similar to this i posted 'affaire de coeur: xxiii or xxii' i'm not very sure...

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Viola Grey 30 October 2008

'There are missed heartbeats a grip of fear permanently situated on the neck of unformed words '........ I could just sit and read these lines for days and still get new inspirations from them....awesome.

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Dr.Wardha Jawdat 30 October 2008

of all the tweaking i did the one bit i left untouched was my most fav bit: 'There are missed heartbeats a grip of fear permanently situated on the neck of unformed words '........ exactly that.!

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Sathyanarayana M V S 05 November 2008

This is excellent Bhayya! Golden words flowed like lava of knowledge and wisdom and beauty. High imagery..................you won my 10

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Aijaz Asif 07 November 2008

another superb write indeed....you've a beautiful talent to convert feelings into words sir...bravo bravo 10++++++ nd +++++A

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Kasia Fedyk 22 May 2012

It is fantastic, incredible write! Thank you!

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Francesca Martin 01 April 2010

This is wonderful! Although the content is unfortunate, I still find it such a good read. I have missed reading your poetry very much! You don't mean my Literature teacher, do you?

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Linda Ori 13 September 2009

So sad to see the beginning of the end of a relationship. The handwriting is on the wall, and it's all downhill from there. The unfinished sentences, the things left unsaid, words that stick in your throat - because of obstinacy or hurt pride? What does it matter? There is no easy way - endings are always painful. This is so heartfelt, crushing, and extremely sad. A powerful read. Linda

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Marieta Maglas 19 June 2009

''There are reasons for the dense forest of absurdities; there is philosophy in the mindless mire of our shared obstinacy '' very deeply cognitive visual metaphor..........excellent poem...10++++

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a very expressive poem in a wonderful way penned..10++++ There are half finished sentences barbs of whose alphabets herald all virgin conversations and…. There are missed heartbeats a grip of fear permanently situated on the neck of unformed words

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