What is wrong with today's lass and lad?
Should they adapt to all the society's fad?
Should they talk with nothing but contempt,
and take all decisions in haste and then repent?
What is wrong with today's lass and lad?
should they to look good, so illy clad?
Should the whole night they party,
and enjoy only with their friends, when they are hearty?
What is wrong with today's lass and lad?
Should they kick their parents out, when they are mad?
Nice to see such young mind and heart raising such questions. And very relevant ones. The poem seems not in agreement with some youth behaviour, but implies to the fact that there is some reason behind it which the elders fail to understand. Keep the good work up, young pen.
Thank you so much sir for so deeply analysing the poem and for giving your critique on the same.
take all decisions in haste and then repent? they all still so do so I composed a poem MOTHERS DAY TODAY READ IT YOUNG GAL WILL UUUUUUUUUUUUU
(3) change the mistakes you accidentally made based upon readers responses and comments. The huge compliments will come themselves, dear Chandini! Bet! Gain a universal study, that´s one reality to possess as the basic of your poetical future. You have all capacities to become a great poetess. But never look down to other poets since you THINK you are better. Honesty is the best policy. Here I have spoken the truth, thank you!
Thank you ma’am for giving such deep insight into the poem, coming from you, it means a lot to me. I have just started on this poetic journey, and tips and feedback from such established poets like yourselves are much valued and appreciated. Do keep visiting my page in the future and help me improve my poems.
(2) and us, parents and their kid-rebels, like in this poem you take the place of the parents attitude. Amazing! Keep creating young poetess, be diligent, accept and change all things that you realize are wrong and see and observe you will become a great poetess, truly great star, a great poetic star. You have innate talent in chosing the themes of your poem and the God-given heart to listen, the insight heart to correct and
(1) Dear young poetess, dear Chandini, on this age and you created such warm and heart warming poems. You are unique (I started around your age too creating poems for public reading) since your thoughts are mature for such an age! It´s constantly learning and changing, meanwhile you have written beautiful poems engaging life
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
By the way, excellent poetry too, congratulations.. You lifted my moral, good to see young people that still can think and have a heart, so rare today.
Thanks to you Sandra. Your comments made my day: -)
Keep up the your wonderful work, you will go far, I know it! Write, live, learn and give. You shall never regret it. My pleasure to have discovered one that will become, , a poetic star. you've got talent and heart, the good formula.