Bhaswat Chakraborty

Your Song

I remember all about you
When I sing the song you wrote
The eyes get wet as they knew
The lifelong generosity you dote

Your words and your themes
Touch my heart as the morning sun
Melting into easy streams
The icebergs of my pain and burn

You appear in my reflection
You pervade my senses’ grip
You stay in utter perfection
On the altar of my worship

*******Translated from original Bengali*******

Poem Submitted: Friday, July 24, 2009
Poem Edited: Sunday, May 22, 2011

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  • Nooruddeen MmNooruddeen Mm (11/3/2009 7:50:00 AM)

    Lovely

    Rgds
    Nooruddeen

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  • Anu Joshy (9/12/2009 6:09:00 AM)

    this poem reminds me of the lines..'when the hurt is full words are few'.....so much of emotions expressed in these few lines....if the translation is so beautiful the original must be awesome! ! !

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  • Peter Vector (9/7/2009 8:53:00 PM)

    Yes, indeed a very pure and heart felt poem, about a compassionate love; I can only hope the narrators beloved knows his longing for her. I would believe it is inferred because she wrote the song for or about him yes?

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  • Philosophy of a DewyFlower (9/3/2009 6:46:00 AM)

    a heartfelt poem! well expressed!

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  • Lady Grace (9/3/2009 6:26:00 AM)

    nicely written..good job..

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  • E DM (8/24/2009 9:35:00 AM)

    Hi Bhaswat,
    Again I am not able to judge the Bengali version of this poem. I know, because my mother language is not English, that poems written in one language cannot be rendered correctly in another. This poem's style is romantic at heart, and while there is nothing wrong with being romantic, the language has moved on from that. We are now in the post modernist era. This means that expressions such as pain, heart, burn, wet eyes, utter perfection and similar have lost their evocative power as they have become common expressions. I believe poetry is the forge of language and new meanings, new metaphors, new justapositions of contrasting words must be sought in order to convey what we feel to a modern audience, to challenge, amuse and shock them. Try to rewrite it in a more biting manner, shake us, our beliefs, tell us something we do not know: what's so special about the songs you write about? Tell us why we should listen to them too. We want to know why they are so special to you and not the effects on you. If they are special we we feel the same as you. I know it is hard work but great poetry isn't easy. And don't mind the rhyme...post-modernists do not need rhyme (although it does not hurt if you manage to achieve it) . I am looking forward to read the new version.

    regards

    enea
    p.s. I hope I have not been too harsh...but I am really trying to help and of course this is my modest opinion. Best of luck. :))

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  • Rajaram RamachandranRajaram Ramachandran (8/17/2009 10:56:00 PM)

    A lovely song to read indeed!

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  • Christina Phan (8/13/2009 1:09:00 AM)

    Lovely and sweet 10++

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  • Yoggita Rathakrishnan (8/8/2009 7:38:00 AM)

    well done my frend....beautiful written...d gal must b lucky cuz she symbolize ur poem...luv d way u put d poem 2gether... (*_*)

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  • Roman Petrov (8/8/2009 4:40:00 AM)

    I like this lovely poem as well, I'll give you 10 votes, but it should get 100 votes!

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  • Lynn Glover (8/8/2009 4:38:00 AM)

    very nice poem, just keep on singing her song. Good rythem. Your Friend Lynn

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  • Hiding Nothing (8/7/2009 8:22:00 PM)

    Beautiful and completely heart-warming.

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  • Noel Horlanda (8/7/2009 7:29:00 PM)

    A lovely love song dedicated to whoever she is. Beautiful lines and rhymes. Thanks

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  • Eyan Desir (8/7/2009 8:50:00 AM)

    Good write............

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  • Catrina Heart (8/6/2009 10:02:00 AM)

    Your words and your themes
    Touch my heart as the morning sun
    Melting into easy streams
    The icebergs of my pain and burn
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    lovely written poem, fine figurative language used here...well done!

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  • Marieta MaglasMarieta Maglas (8/6/2009 9:25:00 AM)

    wonderful poem, well written.......10+

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  • Allemagne RoßmannAllemagne Roßmann (8/6/2009 7:19:00 AM)

    Melting into easy streams
    The icebergs of my pain and burn
    very good translation.....i hardly speak the language though....good work 10 voted

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  • premji premjipremji premji (8/6/2009 5:59:00 AM)

    you appear in my soul with the brilliance of a million suns...

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  • Sarwar ChowdhurySarwar Chowdhury (8/6/2009 4:58:00 AM)

    This is nice! chosen words are fine!
    10+

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  • Sandra Fowler (8/6/2009 3:18:00 AM)

    Very heartfelt and romantic.
    10, for you.

    Warm regards,

    Sandra

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