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(270) As One

Rating: 3.2

Sitting in the shimmering,
noon sun.

basking together as one.
It was just you and me,

why we were allergic,
to reality.

You touched me,

I always touched you.
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Grace Tan 24 March 2007

Aww, its lovely, but... yet, sad. I think the last few lines really packed in the impact to this poem. If only you could be more, than a pair of old shoes... I'm sure in lifetimes, people always wish they could be more, or give more to people they love, be better than they are. But do take note, these people we love, love us, for who we already are. It's a beautiful concept brought up with this lovely, short, poem.

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Alfredo Jacques 04 December 2006

I just wanted to say I liked your poem and great line'why we were allergic, to reality.'

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Moya Levy 26 October 2006

I really like this! Different, pleasing! Moyax

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Jessy Liz 14 September 2006

An excellent write.. Turns out to be not what one had expected. A ten again.

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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 11 September 2006

Melvina...A work of astuteness & cleverity...in short...simply superb! '''''''''''''''''''''''''frank

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Moon Batchelder 06 September 2006

such a fine poem...takes one on a journey...albeit one that ends poorly (i think) the last stanza is so sad...to be no more than this after all of that...

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Pia Andersson 02 September 2006

I't was just you and me, why we were allergic, to reality.' I think most of us fears reality, its too brutal and the daylight can be to clear and hurt our eyes I like this poem Melvina..

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Tailor Bell 20 August 2006

a wonderful piece, Melvina. -Tailor

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Shane Markie 18 August 2006

Aren't we all allergic to reality? Or are we just addicted to it? Shane

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