john tiong chunghoo

Gold Star - 4,879 Points (Jan 21,1960 / Sibu, Sarawak, Borneo East Malaysia)

A Dance? - Poem by john tiong chunghoo

a dance?
a candle flame
courting
faint breeze
to and fro
to and fro
slender
shadows

the autumn leaf
twists, twists
on a twig
eve of separation
lovers refusing
each other go

red and brown maple
swirl in unison
beat their last drum
then let themselves
free from hangers
trail the breeze
swirl, twirl,
somersault,
jump over each other
hip hop dancers
in maddening mood

the two parter
floral crepe curtain
at the open window
springs a solitary flight
up down, down up, twists

her fair and frail physique
over the field
a pink lotus in lake
gently, gently
a darting shadow
over the blazing sky

the ants on a
floating leaf
run round the edge
cross to the other edge
run round the edge
cross to the other edge

rain
under the streetlamp
swarm of insects
drunken, in their last frenzy
over elixir of light

joining the fiesta
in the streets
reflected in carlight
a million girls jump
flaunt their skirts
and well honed postures
heels over heads


Comments about A Dance? by john tiong chunghoo

  • (2/19/2007 9:46:00 AM)


    i like this poem your writing is unique and different but really good (Report) Reply

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  • (9/2/2006 9:40:00 AM)


    Your poem dances, teases and twirls! ! ! Loved your style. (Report) Reply

  • (6/17/2006 12:14:00 PM)


    Wonderful imagery John, the flow and rhythm is enough to make me want to twirl and whirl with everything else that's dancing to life's music. Kind regards, Justine (Report) Reply

  • (6/4/2006 11:32:00 AM)


    Beauty is everywhere, in every simple thing... A poem to read again and again, and so I will. Thank you, John. You have a gift. (Report) Reply

  • (4/21/2006 6:03:00 AM)


    dance?
    a candle flame
    courting
    faint breeze
    to and fro
    to and fro
    slender
    shadows

    the autumn leaf
    twists, twists
    on a twig
    eve of separation
    lovers refusing
    each other go

    red and brown maple
    swirl in unison
    beat their last drum
    then let themselves
    free from hangers
    trail the
    I really like this poem
    (Report) Reply

  • (3/25/2006 10:08:00 AM)


    The whole world is moving in bliss, if we just stop what we are doing and pay atention.

    I would suggest not reusing the title in the first line, and just heading into the image of the candle.

    Also, dropp the quesiton mark, . In a poem, a thig is what the poem says a thing is - you don't need to ask permission!

    This does what good poems are supposed to do - make us see.
    (Report) Reply

  • (3/23/2006 12:01:00 PM)


    I love dancing John and especially this sort. I could dance till they drop. A truly upligting poem. Thanks for sharing it. 10 from dancing on air! Tai (Report) Reply

  • (3/23/2006 9:47:00 AM)


    Wonderful imagery. A poem to dance with indeed.

    Regards, Sandra Fowler
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, March 23, 2006

Poem Edited: Thursday, March 23, 2006


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