A Laptop Universe Poem by GREENWOLFE 1962

A Laptop Universe

Rating: 5.0


'Gee, you're looking good today'.
I said as I looked down.
He winked a bit and slightly smiled,
But never made a sound.

'Yes, you're looking good today '.
I said in joyful cheer.
I would have hugged him oh so tight,
Could I have held him near.

He was there, just as he was,
Sure all there was of him.
A silent head, without a form.
A tech, in charge of them.

The wires and plugs that kept alive
The head of my best friend.
So he could live another day,
of life, that may not end.

The table there on which it lay,
A laptop universe.
Sadly holding this display.
How could a fate be worse?

They'd made for him a phony form,
Just as he once had been.
They sure need a place called Hell,
To put these _______s in.

I pressed a tab on his display
And he soon came alive.
What ere it was, it seemed as though,
He had a good hard drive.

I heard his voice as it had been.
Amazing, what they do!
'My friend, I'm glad you came today.
I don't see much of you '.

I tried to smile, it must be him,
I thought there after all.
Science plays such tricks on us
So often in this hall.

He talked to me, I talked to him,
For just a little while.
I wonder at such things as this,
Our lives of endless guile.

I left the lab of tortured souls
And looked out at the stars.
Perhaps they did such things as this
Once long ago, on Mars.

I breathed the air, such as it was;
With all its smoke and grit
And prayed I'd be at peace someday
As just a part of it.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jessica Rosalie Smith 01 October 2008

Wow I love the concept of this poem. a startling message delivered so rhythmically...good job! =)

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Ron Schmidt 08 October 2008

Lorraine was right, I can learn a lot from someone like you, Awesome! 10+

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Cheryl Lynn Moyer-peele 06 December 2008

Greenwolfe - My laptop universe has a green wolfe, who has escaped into cyberspace, never to return. blessings - Cheryl

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Rich in rhythim and commendable in content. Keep up the good works

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Michael Gale 20 January 2009

Great poem of emotions sad and unclothed. If i could have rated it, it would receive a ten. God bless poets all-MJG.

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Colin J... 18 July 2009

As per the number of comments... A great poem of this technological age... Superb... Colin J...

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Cristy Upshaw 15 April 2009

Your words always so brilliant and deeply empowering. Technology is truly nothing without the interaction of people's creative minds and involvement.

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technology in whatever form is nothing without the man behind it...the technological connectivity we have now is just great...the people haven't become true enough to really connect

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Elaine Oxamendi Vicet 15 March 2009

The drudgery, the dependency on the almighty tech. True we do personalise the inanimate and for some it is their only company. Sadness and truth resonates; rhyme or no..I like it and think it is well penned.

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Duh Huh 17 February 2009

Funny and thought provoking. I saw myself in it. I loved it, thank you, i will read more. :)

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