a crow, charcoal black, fierce eyes, blue
saturn ring in neck, beak dense black
sharp, arrived mysterious from nowhere
sat on a tree branch bearing mangoes
that protruded to front court yard of the
house, and began to peck it furious! .
inside the house, parents, uncle, aunt and
children sat around grandma, anxiety writ
on face, for she lay speechless for days.
a shattering sound brought all of them to
court yard, saw branch lay fallen, quickly
did the crow fly away leaving the tree! .
when returned home, on surprise wailing of
mother, they found to great shock, grandma
had flown away with the mysterious crow! .
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Surya, the themes of your poems are always unique.A few which I have read are alien to the general concepts but each adorned with a powerful message.This happens also in real lives and once we experience this, we start having a hunch of good omen or bad omen at the sight of something new and strange. Very nicely brought out.
grandma had flown away with the mysterious crow. Surya, I liked your dramatic sad story, in spite of the sadness I enjoyed it, you chose the suitable metaphor; Crow is a symbol of death! ! ! a great symbolic poem. 10+++
Hi Surya - An interesting poem - in the UK crows are treated with caution and, because they are so jet black - as harbigers of death. Verse One introduces us to a rather scary crow - Charcoal black - dense black - mystreious from nowhere - pecking furiously at the mangoes! In Verse Two you focus on the occupants of the house - particularly Grandma. Was this myterious Crow a harbinger of her death? Their vigil is broken in Verse Three - A shattering sound - a falen barnch - a departing crow - Family rushing into the Courtyard. There is so much movement in this verse I found myself quite breathless just reading it. Verse Four compounds the mystery. When they go back in the house to comfort Grandma - she is no longer there - 'Grandma had flown away with the mysterious Crow! ! ' Is this a euphamism for death 'Flown Away' or had she acctaully been translated to Paradise? This happened to Elijah and others so it is not unknown in History and Folk Law. Gradmas are wonderful do they get an automatic entry to Paradise - I would like to think so! It is an amazing folk poem and has given all who had read it a gentle thrill of the mysterious and the unknown. There is a message - don't despise the crow - take heed to his omen - I score it TEN. Yours in poetry - JOHN.
A really great read. Please read my poem Feathered tears, thanks John.
wow..what a nice plot! ! ! ! a sad one..love this poem wid ma heart....thanx...10+++
Sphinx came back but granny went out…nicely conceived but gosh yet true….such happens in our lives and your poetic eyes perceived it… Offbeat canvas …is it under para-psychology …for coincidental occurrences…? 10+ Ms. Nivedita UK
when returned home, on surprise wailing of mother, they found to great shock, grandma had flown away with the mysterious crow! ......sometimes they forcast large loom of worst fears.... i believe in it.. simple but great work......10 read mine black crow
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I appreciate the whole metaphor, and the connections of dreams and reality. Well expressed.10/10