A Promise Poem by Ali Eckermann

A Promise

Rating: 3.3


She gives him a cloud of parrots
He expects her to peel the carrots
She gives him a safari cruise
He expects her to hide the bruise
She gives him a blue magic rabbit
He expects her to feed his habit.

He gives her a kicking horse
She expects his true remorse
He gives her a rotting plum
She expects a little freedom
He gives her his silver spoon
She expects she’ll kill him soon.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sylvia Frances Chan 18 October 2019

Because if too much silence, then this amazing ironical poem full of cynical notes was born. So true. Man must not abuse his life partner, IF still so, then such things as in this poem can happen. Be alerted, man! This woman is smarter than you think., hey man! A most deserving Modern Poem Of The Day! CONGRATULATIONS on being chosen as TMPOTD. Hurray for Ali! A 10 Full Score and myriad of 10´s more. God´s Blessings.

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Sylvia Frances Chan 18 October 2019

DOUBLE CONGRATULATIONS being chosen TWICE, same date another year. Since you are woman, I am very proud of you and I know the situations you had been in so well. I had been been to your area and to many many parts of Down Under. Amazing Country Continent. You write excellent poems, Ali. That you must know.

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Mahtab Bangalee 18 October 2018

Expectation and reception, sometimes in individual twin soul, stand as opposition political parties /// nice poem

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Adrian Flett 18 October 2018

The rawness of the verse reflects the tough relationship it portrays.

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thomas goodman 05 December 2020

chilling, but sadly all too common

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Sylvia Frances Chan 13 October 2024

AGAIN chosen by PoemHunter and Team as The Modern Poem Of The Day, hooray! Great Congrats to Ali Eckermann

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Rob Lamberton 12 October 2024

An empty promise is full of heart aches!

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 12 October 2024

A vivid depiction of abuse and its ultimate effect. A great warning to all. Brilliantly crafted poem.

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Sylvia Frances Chan 12 December 2023

TODAY again chosen by Poem Hunter and Team as The Modern Poem Of The Day. Very thought-provoking and so realistic. Most deserving to be chosen again as the Modern Poem Of The Day.

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MAHTAB BANGALEE 26 January 2021

She and He is together a life of peace

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