{INSPIRED TO WRITE IN THIS FORM AFTER READING
KARIN ANDERSON'S 'BUTTERFLY MAGIC'}
[ a poem of ten lines syllable count equating
to line number]
then,
nation
India
got it's freedom
not through violence
it was through ahimsa
no arms and ammunition
a tribute to humanity
a mahatma brought out the human
humanity addressed humanity
after sixty years of independence
the leader addressing the nation
stands behind bullet protection
parade of troops showing strength
detectors showing fear
fear addressing fear
fearless trait then
a nation
with fear
now
[ ahimsa - non violence]
[mahatma - a great soul GANDHI]
this is such a nice and thought provoking poem. thanks for sharing. all great leaders have left and afterwards we have forgotton their lesson and exapmles of life. i wish we can change ourselves and become honest and brave.
You’ve chosen the double etheree (double tetractys) for a good theme…and done justice to it. Interestingly, this is some significant coincidence that I happen to read this during the birth month of the great soul. # 10.
Brilliant. Not just because of the form but also because Mahatma Gandhi is someone I am devoted to.10.
Dear Samanyan, Thanks for your invite to read and rate this poem. Nicely presented both in form and content. Good write always brings good marks so A10 Rajkumar (My comments are also in ten syllable counts)
India's freedom was brought through ahimsa but after sixty years of India's freedom, the foundation of Ahimsa and humanity are no more existent.Violence is very much prevalent in the country. Very thought provoking, nicely written poem.
What a cool form for a poem; and you have certainly done justice here; both to the form and to the poem.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
this is the perfect form for this powerful and beautiful poem....and hopefully like the catterpillar/butterfly....change is always possible for the better.....bring back Ghandi, please!