A Silent Sight Poem by Samanyan Lakshminarayanan

A Silent Sight

Rating: 4.9

a fleet of birds
in the sky
forming an arrow
cutting across the wind
to reach their destination....
the shape remains the same
the birds keep changing their positions
to avoid exhaustion
what was the instruction?
who was their instructor?
no gathered audience
there was not a sound in this sight

a fleet of fighter planes
in the sky
forming an arrow
cutting across the wind
it was a demonstration
the shape keeps changing
the planes keep changing positions
it is a planned execution
there was an instruction
there was a team leader
a gathered audience to applause
there was a lot of sound in this sight

one is quite natural....
the other is done to show potential.

Lynn Glover 25 September 2009

A very good write. I enjoyed reading and give you a 10. Your friend Lynn

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Raymond Rivera 26 September 2009

I've tried for the last five minutes, but I really can not put into words how insightful this poem is. The imagery was top notch. And the ending is a breath of fresh thought. In the overdone, yet still immortal words of Borat, 'Very nice.' =P 10/10 for sure. I'll be reading more in the future, when it's not 2: 00 A.M.

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Ravi Sathasivam 26 September 2009

A good comparison between nature and mankind potential. Well said. Beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing with me

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Ency Bearis 08 March 2009

great analogy write of instinct and natural ability into poetical concept..10

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C. P. Sharma 08 March 2009

A thought provoking poem. Man has a tendency to immitate Nature and pose his superiority. But during the process delinks from the source resulting into catastrophe. CP

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Paul Amrod 27 May 2018

Hi Samanyan, The only spiritual presence is that of the birds. If we as humans cannot talk over problems then we are lost, Greetings, Paul

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Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK 06 November 2009

It’s a very good observation of Nature’s mosaic and well compared with ‘Man-Made’ same. Enjoyed Sir. Ten+ niv. New post Expiry ~ Date or any poem. Please read and comment and…. niv.

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Emu Getachew 31 October 2009

One is divinely orchestrated and the other flocks of birds could be used to destroy divine's beauty. Great comparison.

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Swatimalya Chattopadhyay 25 October 2009

Without any formal training, a fleet of bird take an organized flight, reorient themselves to change position.Fighter planes do the same thing under instruction. Apparently their patterns of cruises are very similar, but a lot differs behind.Excellent idea.

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Nalini Hebbar 08 October 2009

manmade vs nature...for me nature wins hands down...regards

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