Bri Edwards

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A Sonnet, Defined...... [as Per Paul Brookes; Not In Sonnet Form] - Poem by Bri Edwards

Four-line stanzas, except for the last, which will be two.
Each line: of ten syllables; eleven syllables just won't do.
'You' must rhyme line one with three, and line two with four.
Last stanza: line-endings rhyme. That's it. There's no more.

(November 20,2013)

Poet's Notes about The Poem

when Paul Brookes aka Babbling Brookes (i JUST got the 'joke'....babbling brooks...get it?) read my 'new' 'I Will Survive' poems, he said he would love to see 'i will survive' in sonnet form. i suggested that he write one, not me. walla! in a very short time he wrote the following:

'English fourteen line Sonnet Form of 'I Will survive': O))
The best I could do at short notice it's a little poor in places hope I've got the gist
the Sonnet is very precise and its lines must be ten syllables and it is short so I couldn't get all your points in

[Paul's sonnet]:

It was a cold November afternoon
He said you have to move now out my bed.
I took it for a joke but learnt too soon
His eyes though, erased this thought out my head,

And though shocked, yet I had seen it coming,
I need you out in two days time no less
Though hard I know tis my own shortcoming,
How did we manage to make such a mess?

There was a time we were never parted
Then you were always so late from your work
So many nights I spent broken hearted
And our love making you did sadly shirk.

Yet here I am and glad to be alive
And without you, you know, I will survive.'

so that is my story and i'm sticking to it! i wrote my 'sonnet' poem as a response to paul AND to help me remember how to compose a sonnet........just in case i get ambitious; i'm not awfully good at counting syllables. well, maybe i AM 'awful' at it. :)

p.s. are there other kinds of sonnets [he wrote 'English fourteen line Sonnet Form']? i'm NOT changing my title!

Comments about A Sonnet, Defined...... [as Per Paul Brookes; Not In Sonnet Form] by Bri Edwards

  • Chinedu Dike (2/15/2015 12:32:00 PM)

    Well sonnet or no sonnet, a beautiful piece of poetry is what matters. The TOP two poet's on the Site, Maya Angelou and Robert Frost did not write sonnets. As a matter of fact most of the poems on Poemhunter are of Free Verse and Free Style. Remain blessed Bri. (Report) Reply

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  • Aries Profanisaurus (11/7/2014 6:33:00 PM)

    I have never been inclined to write in sonnet form. If I ever do it will be accident only. Stick to your story Bri and that way you won't have to change it (Report) Reply

  • Paul Brookes (11/21/2013 11:49:00 AM)

    Er thanks for this Bri I owe you one. Help I can't do Sonnets! ! ! ! ! So I will leave it for better men. BB (Report) Reply

  • (11/20/2013 7:51:00 PM)

    the confining form not perhaps suitable when you consider the freedom he was granted in being evicted from the bed. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 20, 2013

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