Samanyan Lakshminarayanan


# # A Soul - Part Three - Poem by Samanyan Lakshminarayanan

As my dad came towards the cradle
to see me
ignoring my mom in total
she could see life and love in his eye
anger and alcohol has shown up
'red' in those all these days...for her to see

seeing me..touching my tender hands
feeling my face and hair
this rough man missed 'softness'
for the first time in his life
he stood there happy and confused
this intoxication was new to him

he could not stop coming to see me
he did come every day
he did start talking to my mom
it was about me..only about me
he learned to carry me from my mom
a thrilled dad he became

on the day of discharge
as he carried me through the corridor...
all people who knew him stood exclaimed


Comments about # # A Soul - Part Three by Samanyan Lakshminarayanan

  • Sivashanmugam Shanmugam (1/1/2010 8:55:00 AM)


    part 3... while reading it seems a prose.in my opinion, the thread can be more shapen as a prosody..any how it gives pleasant look...nice (Report) Reply

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  • (12/30/2009 8:29:00 AM)


    a child is a part of us.not a soul is hard-hearted enough to be softened by just a glimpse of his child. (Report) Reply

  • (12/26/2009 12:30:00 PM)


    ‘…this intoxication was new to him…’

    Climaxing and turning point…well addressed poetically…
    Ten+
    Ms. Nivedita
    UK
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  • C. P. Sharma (12/26/2009 6:46:00 AM)


    Innate love for self perpetuation is the driving force in life.
    CP
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  • (12/23/2009 12:05:00 PM)


    Samanyan, yes, babies can transform lives and people in ways totally unexplained. isn't that's why they tell a couple having trouble to make a baby in the hope it will save the marriage.
    a very tender write. i totally agree with what Nikunj has said.

    was away for a week.thus the delay in reading this heart touching poem.

    Mamta
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  • (12/20/2009 8:52:00 AM)


    Ur poem is very close to reality im inspired by ur poem, it really touched my heart..10+ (Report) Reply

  • (12/16/2009 10:32:00 PM)


    Well it certainly sounds as if it were a redeeming experience for someone in need!
    Also you needed your dad and it was fitting he needed you too.
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  • (12/16/2009 6:14:00 AM)


    a beautiful ending......well done....10 (Report) Reply

  • Rajaram Ramachandran (12/15/2009 7:07:00 PM)


    The reunion of a drunkard soul is seen here. (Report) Reply

  • (12/15/2009 12:43:00 PM)


    Portrays a soft touch of redemption in a new life. [ children are a gift of GOD ] (Report) Reply

  • (12/15/2009 10:31:00 AM)


    the earnest expression of the poem touches me.....its a rasa kavya......thats the word that best tells the magnitude of the emotions......my eyes are brimming with tears! (Report) Reply

  • (12/14/2009 3:37:00 AM)


    new intoxication.....nice term. Again this poem is very close to reality. images of a hospital, a child sleeping in the cradle...home coming etc. simple, sweet and stimulating.... (Report) Reply

  • Indira Renganathan (12/14/2009 1:06:00 AM)


    You're lucky to be smiled at by your father...having learnt how a smile heals the wounded heart....you must throw it at your mother and your wife and kids as well...'keep smiling 'should be the motto in everyone's life isn't it...lovely write (Report) Reply

  • (12/11/2009 2:43:00 AM)


    Obviously.......i was inspired by your profound poem............it penetrated my own soul.......... (Report) Reply

  • (12/7/2009 8:21:00 PM)


    wow what a heartfelt poetic story here Sam...it made me cry...a father's love, a child's magic to soften and renew one's soul.........well done! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • (12/7/2009 5:02:00 PM)


    The lights just came on! A beautiful conclusion
    to a very compelling life story.10/10.

    Kind regards,

    Sandra
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  • Louis Rams (12/5/2009 11:00:00 PM)


    the pride of a new found dad.
    beautiful! a ten
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  • Fay Slimm (12/4/2009 2:14:00 AM)


    You wove the parts together very well Sam and made the happy ending a pleasure for the reader.... a good three parter and top marks from Fay. (Report) Reply

  • (12/3/2009 11:16:00 PM)


    you unwind well the feelings inside you...thanks...10 (Report) Reply

  • Maia Padua (12/3/2009 6:55:00 PM)


    not to late to renew...and be back to own self again
    great theme here....
    interesting...touching...
    an angel came and change him...
    really a very significant write...
    10+++

    Lovelots,

    Maia
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, December 2, 2009



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