asma bahrainwala

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A Sudden Storm - Poem by asma bahrainwala

The blinding light
Of the brightest ever sun
Suddenly shrouded
By a thick pall of impenetrable darkness.

A strange silence engulfs.

A sudden chill creeps in;
The wind begins to blow
Gently-wildly-ferociously,
Forming a dense screen of dust.

The wind gains momentum.

It sucks the dry leaves
Up towards the sky,
A greedy funnel forms;
The trees sashay to the rhythm.

The wind begins to howl.

A roaring thunder roars,
Alarms the mighty earth,
Rips it off its grave silence,
And shoves it into utter chaos.

A frightening darkness befalls.

Now, I can hear the sky
Shrieking with pain;
Thunder-bolt and lightening,
Now it breaks into rain.

A heavenly downpour.

The anger subsides;
Tears begin to flow;
Nature reconciles.

A cool breeze gently blows.

A curious sun peeps,
Spreading a bright smile;
Darkness evaporates.

The landscape dazzles again.



2nd October 2006


Comments about A Sudden Storm by asma bahrainwala

  • Melvina GermainMelvina Germain (6/12/2015 8:55:00 PM)

    Wow that certainly took me on a dynamic journey. Thank you Asma..... (Report)Reply

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  • Ron Flowers (6/22/2008 7:00:00 AM)

    A real good poem. Very vivid. (Report)Reply

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  • Vidyadhar DurgekarVidyadhar Durgekar (3/8/2008 8:46:00 AM)

    good poem................ (Report)Reply

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  • Roopa MenonRoopa Menon (10/8/2007 6:26:00 AM)

    Nice poem. Please keep writing (Report)Reply

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  • Melvina GermainMelvina Germain (8/26/2007 9:37:00 AM)

    A remarkable description of a storm and it fury, your imagry is spectacular. You paint a fantastic pictue and you do it well. Excellent work Asma, I truly enjoyed the read.--Melivna-- (Report)Reply

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  • Babasaheb Salve (3/31/2007 12:46:00 AM)

    strongly it reminds Wordsworth (Report)Reply

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  • Jibin JosephJibin Joseph (1/4/2007 12:12:00 AM)

    hi asma
    great thought

    Life does not consist mainly, or even largely, of facts and happenings. It consists mainly of the storm of thought that is forever flowing through one's head

    a 10 for ur storm of thoughts
    peace
    jibin...........
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  • Peter A. Crowther (12/16/2006 1:12:00 AM)

    This is really superb descriptive writing; I'm not surprised it has got so many '10s'. (Report)Reply

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  • Diane Violet (12/9/2006 1:01:00 PM)

    The life of a storm fabulously depicted in this poem. the imagery and structure outstanding. All the best, Diane (Report)Reply

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  • Melvina GermainMelvina Germain (12/3/2006 8:56:00 AM)

    The imagry in this poem is absolutely fantastic, thanks for the running explanations, fabulous--great poem Asma--Melvina-- (Report)Reply

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  • Susan Bagley (11/29/2006 9:23:00 AM)

    Asma, I love this! It reminds me of my Southern Rain poem only your imagery and feeling are approached differently! Good work! ! !

    Susan :)
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  • Jon Lloyd (11/27/2006 4:26:00 AM)

    I am not going to say anything that hasn't been said before about this wonderful work, but I would just like to add my voice to the throng! !

    (Loved the line about the trees 'sashaying to the rhythm'...!)

    Good stuff - thanks.

    Jon.
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  • Prasanna Kumari (11/22/2006 9:55:00 AM)

    nature's fury becomes more furious with your words -as if everything will be wiped off from the face of earth.but then there is reconciliation also...beautiful (Report)Reply

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  • Shivapriya Surve (11/19/2006 11:22:00 PM)

    I have no words!
    It's the landscape come alive by your magical expression!
    I went through the whole turmoil and again gently traversed the gentle, reassuring shores! ! ! ! ! !
    Bravo, Asma! !
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  • Catastrophe King (10/15/2006 1:39:00 PM)

    I loved the creativity shown by you here. The single lines in between, works like anchors binding the verses together. A true display of brilliance and talent, keep them coming for us... we are all loving it! Complete 10 for you here. (Report)Reply

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  • Original Unknown Girl (10/10/2006 5:57:00 AM)

    fabulous! I'm adding this to my favourites.... you capture the total intensity of the storm and mirror it with feelings too! I love this asma.... Humber Girl: -) (Report)Reply

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  • Peter A. Crowther (10/5/2006 12:45:00 PM)

    I like the use of the single lines like a coda after each stanza. The poem really builds up the tension of the gathering storm, its violence and then the release of tension as it passes. Good write and a 10 from me (Report)Reply

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  • Vallerie Lobell (10/2/2006 9:16:00 AM)

    another great poem asma...where have you been hiding? ? ? ? ......Vallerie (Report)Reply

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  • Marilyn Shepperson (10/2/2006 9:10:00 AM)

    Brilliant poem, really brings the picture of a storm to life. Marilyn (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, October 2, 2006

Poem Edited: Thursday, October 7, 2010


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