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Rating: 4.9

I am a well.
Confined by a wall;
Restricted by a boundary;
Stagnated by it all.

I desire to be a river;
I desire to flow;
I desire to merge
With waters diverse.

My wall is a block.
A societal construct;
A self-imposed isolation;
A resultant stagnation.

I desire to break this wall
I desire to flow

3rd September 2006

Brett Ackerman 14 October 2007

A magnificent roll of designed words that fuel the flames of life-affirming freedom. There's a distinguished feeling of triumph here which runs deep and can bring to mind actual examples in today's complex world of countless social barriers. It's not too hard to embrace and indulge in the strong and righteous visual of it.

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Rakesh Jaddu 14 June 2007

You are brilliant! ! !

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Malini Kadir 19 April 2007

Confined by a Wall; Restricted by a Boundary; Stagnated by it All..............overflowing in poetry! great! ! .

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Andrew mark Wilkinson 18 February 2007

Please Asma... keep writing such great poems...10

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Peter A. Crowther 16 December 2006

What a striking metaphor! Beautiful succinct expression of everyone's desire to break out of the self and become a part of the whole. This is a really good poem!

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Ashraful Musaddeq 26 August 2008

Shared ur desire. Appreciable emotion for mankind.

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Sarwar Chowdhury 26 August 2008

.....fine composition.............10

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Greenwolfe 1962 18 August 2008

I'm not sure about the title of this piece. It seems to me that confined or restricted may have been a more appropriate title for this. It really wasn't a very unique message. I don't think you can put a word like desire in a title and expect the reader to be impressed after they read such a writing as this. It was, in my view, average. GW62

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K. V. Venkataramana 10 March 2008

A wonderful poem rooted in modern realities. Thanks for shaing. K V Venkataramana

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rajagopal haran 05 November 2007

what an imagination; Great

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