Desire Poem by asma bahrainwala


Rating: 4.9

I am a well.
Confined by a wall;
Restricted by a boundary;
Stagnated by it all.

I desire to be a river;
I desire to flow;
I desire to merge
With waters diverse.

My wall is a block.
A societal construct;
A self-imposed isolation;
A resultant stagnation.

I desire to break this wall
I desire to flow

3rd September 2006

Brian Dorn 28 September 2006

Asma, there's nothing stagnant about your poetry... I'd say it flows quite nicely. Great write! ! Brian

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Daniel Roxburgh 09 October 2006

I greatly enjoyed this one. Such a wonderful expression of your feelings. So simple and direct. I can relate to these words so very much. Great job!

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Onida 22 November 2006

gr8 poem asma.I liked it very much. yours, Nida

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Roger Bowman 22 November 2006

Lovely poemo Asma. Take care Roger

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Susan Bagley 29 November 2006

Very good! I like the brick by brick! ! ! ! Good work! SusanB

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Ashraful Musaddeq 26 August 2008

Shared ur desire. Appreciable emotion for mankind.

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Sarwar Chowdhury 26 August 2008

.....fine composition.............10

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Greenwolfe 1962 18 August 2008

I'm not sure about the title of this piece. It seems to me that confined or restricted may have been a more appropriate title for this. It really wasn't a very unique message. I don't think you can put a word like desire in a title and expect the reader to be impressed after they read such a writing as this. It was, in my view, average. GW62

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K. V. Venkataramana 10 March 2008

A wonderful poem rooted in modern realities. Thanks for shaing. K V Venkataramana

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rajagopal haran 05 November 2007

what an imagination; Great

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