African Rhythms Poem by Tan Pratonix

Much imagery - indeed, very rich - but I find little meaning. You obviously, at this age, had command of an important element in shaping poetry, but this element cannot stand by itself. I suspect you've matured. Unkill your muse. When I was 25, after 10 years of writing poetry, I wrote a poem that was gorgeous, which, upon my careful examination, said nothing at all. I right then quit writing poetry for 12 years, and my later work was the better for it. I spent those 12 years writing technical articles for Hot Rod Magazine, for audiences of a million readers at a time, and the experience of writing exactly, to exact points, informed my later, creative work. Your 19-year-old self needed a similar discipline. If you acquired it, start writing again.

Your've captured strong images here Tan. Much enjoyed.

Amazing feel! ! I felt as if I was there experiencing it....you have a way with words.

Fantastic imagery. Really enjoyed the colour and life of it. Keep writing, Tan. Eve x

I totally agree with Joy and Max. A stunning poem, full of colour and wonder and perfect technique. You are extremely talented as a poet, so do please write some new ones.

Nice, very nice. It seems I was seeing all what you were describing.

Tan, I don't do drugs, but I swear that awesome vivid imagery was like listening to Pink Floyd and being bathed in their imagery. And I'm really good with visualizing. So that's a huge compliment to you!

Really adventure in Africa. Nicely written.

A beautiful kaleidoscope of images, many gems set in a stirring rhythm. Your best that I've read and it will be in my favourites' list too. I feel I shall read it many times over, Tan.

I absolutely love the imagery in this poem! It makes me think of oil paint straight from the tube: vibrant, thick and glossy. It's a mere description of a scene, without a feeling attached to it, but it's very powerful. I wish I could see it with my eyes instead of my brain! You have rare skills in creating pictures... Excellent.