Audrey Heller

Rookie - 0 Points (2/28/32 / Bronx, New York/ Now residing in Florida)

Alone In A Crowd - Poem by Audrey Heller

Sometimes, in a crowded room, you
can still feel alone. So many people
surround you, but you're strictly on
your own. Looking around the room,
not one familiar face, you see. Should
there be any conversation, it's going
to have to come, from me. I would
have thought just the opposite, seeing
a new person appear. But the way it
looks, it's not going to happen here.
People have become much more
reserved, then they used to be. At
one time, they would pin you down
and gab away. Now, I can't even find
one, who has anything, to say. Next
time, I'll not accept invitations, unless
there's somebody there I know. I'll
just have to be polite, give them a
smile and turn them down, by saying
no!


Comments about Alone In A Crowd by Audrey Heller

  • Lyn Paul (8/6/2017 11:35:00 PM)


    A suited title for your impressive words. Loneliness is a huge issued yet not recognised enough as a problem.
    Thank You.
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  • (8/6/2017 9:09:00 PM)


    Audrey, congratulations on Poem Of The Day! I'm not certain what else needs to be said about this poem. Your peers appear to have said it all. So I'll leave you with this:

    Not Lonely...Not Alone

    To be with people
    Not feel lonely
    To be with oneself
    Not feel alone
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  • Seamus O' Brian (8/6/2017 5:17:00 PM)


    The experience of the subject in finding herself in a roomful of strangers reticent to make contact, with the presumption that this is a reflection of an alteration in social behaviors. Interestingly, the piece itself is very conversational in tone, although with a penchant for a structured rhyme scheme. The poem succeeds in maintaining the routine structure of straightforward poetry, while directly making the somewhat straightforward statement of this perceived alteration in social behavior.

    I think, good poet, I would love to see you abandon the routine structure of poetry for a deeper exploration of the theme of loneliness hinted at in your title. What is it like to be lonely in a crowd? What does loneliness look like surrounded by humanity? What is the shape, the texture, the taste of loneliness in such a situation? What is the quality, the sensation, the palpable shape of the noises of conversation floating around you, but withheld from you? Not just telling the story, but describing the sensory edges of the story, so that we might not just nod in agreement at a familiar situation, but feel the gripping loneliness of your soul resonating within our own.
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  • (8/6/2017 9:32:00 AM)


    So true.nothing like being the wallflower watching the dip get old.I've gone to parties and felt isolated..how to break the ice? Speak up.. good poem with a ring of truth.. (Report) Reply

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (8/6/2017 9:06:00 AM)


    It is true that in a crowded place we sometimes feel lonely if there is no familiar face. And it is because...
    People have become much more
    reserved, then they used to be. At
    one time, they would pin you down
    and gab away.
    Beautiful poem really. Thanks and congratulation for the poem of the day.
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  • Rajnish Manga (8/6/2017 7:54:00 AM)


    The same thing happened to me once. An old friend of mine invited me to attend his daughter's marriage at Dehradun. There was quite a good gathering but I was alone. I also decided to say NO to such invitations. Thanks for sharing. This is my second visit on this page. (Report) Reply

  • Bernard F. Asuncion (8/6/2017 5:21:00 AM)


    Congrats for being chosen.... Highest 10+++++++ (Report) Reply

  • Lantz Pierre (8/6/2017 4:18:00 AM)


    Too prosaic and too weakly crafted to come across as much more than an internal dialogue about a niggling fact of existence. The poem neither presents a greater insight into the phenomenon nor presents the argument is some exquisitely crafted manner which might elevate it. Lines end leaving meaningless words and phrases hanging as if there some arbitrary rule of how long a line should be. Hints are made here and there at some internal rhymes and assonance that are never picked up and used to any effect. In point of fact, I kind of like the simpleness of this poem and what it has to say, even as it doesn't say anything new yet the potential for saying it in a new way is there but never realized. It remains too off-the-cuff and too off-the-shelf for me to find sufficient inspiration. To me this is an opportunity that was missed. (Report) Reply

  • Tom Allport (8/6/2017 2:42:00 AM)


    a wonderful poem of the feelings felt when in the company of strangers beautifully conveyed? .............superbly written. (Report) Reply

  • Robert Murray Smith (8/6/2017 1:02:00 AM)


    A poem that highlights aloneness. In fact, we are all alone as our feelings about the outside world are hidden under our cranium. It is strange that the mind an electrochemical factory of billions of pulsating neurons has this feeling of aloness in a crowd. In fact, every person mentioned in the poem is the same ie. alone. It really is the conversational aspects that are the nub of the poem. Anyone, can converse with another in a group, or elsewhere, it is only a matter of talking. The art of conversation is a learned activity as all intercourse is. (Report) Reply

    Seamus O' Brian Seamus O' Brian (8/6/2017 4:57:00 PM)

    This comment is one of the most interesting segments of writing on this site today, Robert. When it comes to the process of the mind, we can always count on you for an incisive perspective.
    :)
    S

  • Rini Jerry (8/6/2017 12:32:00 AM)


    Nice poem.. Congratulations for poem of the day
    You may like mine 'Emptiness in full bloom'
    Rini
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  • Rajnish Manga (8/7/2016 12:01:00 AM)


    I am so glad you have mentioned this. Countless people would like to share your views ditto. Thanks a lot, Audrey Heller, with a bouquet of good wishes. I quote a few lines below:
    People have become much more
    reserved, then they used to be.
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  • Bernard Snyder (8/6/2016 11:09:00 PM)


    Nicely written poem! (Report) Reply

  • (8/6/2016 2:51:00 PM)


    Congratulations on being selected member of the day..I know the feeling you conveyed in your poem..every body text messages now instead of chatting.. good poem.. (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar (8/6/2016 10:34:00 AM)


    Congrats! ! ! Beautiful poem for the day. You have spoken through the hearts of many. There are many times we feel lonely in crowd. Just to be polite and smile is the best way of dealing with this. Loved reading each lines. (Report) Reply

  • Bharati Nayak (8/6/2016 9:13:00 AM)


    Lonely in a crowd- - A feeling most of us might have experienced in parties or crowded places, even in our own familiar environment if we do not have some one to talk, to smile or to share feelings.Thanks for the beautiful poem.Congratulations for being Poet of the Day. (Report) Reply

  • Anil Kumar Panda (8/6/2016 9:09:00 AM)


    Sometimes it feels good to remain reserved and observe things around. Nice poem. Congrats. (Report) Reply

  • Clarence Prince (8/6/2016 7:39:00 AM)


    Yes, maybe it pays just be polite... by saying no! (Report) Reply

  • (8/6/2016 7:31:00 AM)


    Excellent poem. Heartiest congrats for it's selection as poem of the Day. (Report) Reply

  • Tapan M. Saren (8/6/2016 6:09:00 AM)


    Awful poem. Nothing can I speak more. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, July 19, 2008



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