Often says to me, He
Don’t become like me
Because
You can’t turn back from the track on which I’m
On the spur of the moment;
I say nothing except don’t you worry.
Inside
Deep
Inside
Billions dreams I have to burry.
I not be up to snuff to say even
If I could, I would
In your way of twilight,
Warmly widen my palms
Gentle touch of these
Beneath your feet
Alleviate your impediments
And
Stay away you from all appalling harms.
Wondering around like a willow_ wild
I wish I could build;
A castle of roses,
Every desiccated petal,
Each parched twig of whose,
Planted by love of mine..
Every night when stars would shine,
Moon would beg for,
Spirituality of thine,
Then being an insensitive lover,
I would enclose you in pillow of my arms.
To love and being loved would revamp our desolate charms.
Often he says,
Frequently I think,
If I could, I would squander my life under your limbs.
O my love;
Under your limbs.
Good imagination, the last few lines were my favourite as they were simple, eloquent and playfully romantic.
Dear Farah, never be over-conscious of literary weaknesses in your poem. we always improve with time. Poetry is an expression basically of 'self' so whatever you feel should come out.
Don't ever be in any kind of doubt that you are able to carry your reader with you. You are able to let the reader feel what you feel. A nice beginning and very touching end. You have your own style. If poetry is the name of rules and regulation then even Shakespeare was not a poet. If it is written for people by people then......... you are wonderful.
''Often says to me, He Don’t become like me Because You can’t turn back from the track on which I’m'' innovative tricks to write poetry on two counts....lovely keep going..i love it...10
A beautiful poem, winners neva quit n quitters neva win. I likd d spirituality n moon line both, for im a fan of both. Take care. Pls read my latest poem on mr.bean.
Superb poem..words sounds like as if they are speaking. 10/10 for this beautiful imagination: -)
We all are learners and we all have flaws...pls do not mention any such thing because what you have written here is much strong and passionate...many phrases and lines are just so delicate...very good farah...and strong too! ! !
A voice a silent voice with the sound that can be felt perceived desired and i think must be fulfilled
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Very fine imaginary, quite interesting to read.