poet Hasmukh Amathalal

Hasmukh Amathalal

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At Bay

I stood at the bay
Had no words to say
What a strange way
No attention to pay

She was there on other side
In between areas so wide
Intense urge couldn’t hide
No clue as how to confide?

Tried to shout but had no speech
Distance forbade me to reach
Made me so feeble and weak
Could not find words to speak

May be she has same feeling?
Under constant fear always reeling
Failed to reach peak after scaling
Problem in breathing and inhaling

I have thing or reason to regret
Can still hold for a while or wait
I shouldn’t find any more excuses
Should feel at ease without any issues

I should over come the hurdle
I can’t afford to stay in middle
I must put it straight and right
No hitch but without offering fight

I shall stand to loose the game
No use if responded lately or came
I must explore what should or can be best
All cards to confide and near to the chest

I may hear if you slightly whisper
Read lips movement even if you murmur
May not be that unique feat or achievement
To feel really elated for glorious moment

I may find it worth to explore
Try to confine by not asking more
May be on one day I may succeed
To find big tree emerging from seed

Poem Submitted: Tuesday, December 29, 2009
Poem Edited: Monday, August 1, 2011

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  • Antonio Liao (1/11/2010 11:54:00 PM)

    like the firefly of the night twinkle...amidst the darkest sky....' at bay ',
    seems the hover is coming to land. in the heart that crumple the pain of
    emptiness....
    quite a healthful tablet of comfort....every mind refresh the
    meaning of hope and a goodbye...God bless...my friend...a 10 +++++

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  • Almedia Knight-Oliver (1/11/2010 11:22:00 AM)

    A great poem Hasmukh, pleasing rhymes to ears. The sead of love grows big and its branches hug
    us all. a 10

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  • Prashant ShauryaPrashant Shaurya (1/8/2010 2:45:00 AM)

    the seed of love being sown and the hope of spreading it...
    sir your poem holds the reader..
    beautiful rhymes and so was the rhythm..
    10++ certainly..

    regards
    prashant

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  • Aira Olayvar (1/7/2010 2:15:00 AM)

    The sown seed from the poets’ heart… conveyed thoughts that springs apart… watered by them whose considering this art… it will one day succeed to never fall apart.

    :)

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  • Raj Nandy (1/5/2010 7:08:00 AM)

    May you truly suceed - when a big tree emerges from the poetic seed! 10!
    -Raj

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  • Ken E Hall (1/3/2010 3:37:00 PM)

    exchanging glances strangers in the night a seed is born+++10
    regards

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  • Prince Obed de la CruzPrince Obed de la Cruz (1/2/2010 8:33:00 AM)

    i've read and commented on this poem before but i forgot to rate it 10... nice thing that i've done it now!

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  • Indira Babbellapati (12/30/2009 8:55:00 PM)

    full of hope...good wishes for the year ahead...

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  • Lady Grace (12/30/2009 8:45:00 PM)

    i can't compose words for this coz i dont want fake lines...my words are my soul, my heart and my inner feelings....dear,

    happy new year to the most poetic poet ever...kissesssss..lavs yaaa...

    i hear your poetic whispers
    all over the clouds and river banks
    am here at the seashore
    of hopes and wishes
    that one day after this days...you will come...

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  • Marieta MaglasMarieta Maglas (12/30/2009 11:16:00 AM)

    Read lips movement even if you murmur
    May not be that unique feat or achievement

    excellent meditative poem 10/10

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  • Robert Uy (12/29/2009 11:36:00 PM)

    Nice way of telling a dilemma of expressing feelings...10/10!

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  • Prince Obed de la CruzPrince Obed de la Cruz (12/29/2009 9:40:00 PM)

    the last line is quite catchie

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  • Rajaram RamachandranRajaram Ramachandran (12/29/2009 8:50:00 PM)

    You are a gifted writer and poetry flows from your pen so freely and smoothly like a running river. God bless you.

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  • Hari Khabrani (12/29/2009 11:18:00 AM)

    Inability attains may be later if the feelings were ever true.10+

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  • Kranthi Pothineni (12/29/2009 9:05:00 AM)

    Well composed. Efforts of rhyming made it bright without deviating from plot. Much appreciable work.

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