Big Bang Theory Poem by David DeSantis

Big Bang Theory

Rating: 5.0


I’m a train track
With a knack
for coffee.

A one-way ocean liner
Powered by steam
And defiant of the currents
Around me…


I used to love the art scene
And often,
incongruent things:

like some sort of cataract,
ally-wack,
visine,
drip-drop,
eye clean
hobby.

I am a ying-yang
Thought stream
Powered by
feng shui
energy beams

A naturalized naturalist,
Pessimistic
Pacifist

It’s safe to say
That I’m not very

Sunny.




Copyright (c) David DeSantis

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Original Unknown Girl 14 April 2008

Wow! That is sooo good! I love the flow of words, the poem reads really well. Good one David. HG: -) xx

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Michael Campbell 14 April 2008

another great poem by the poet desantis. don't forget about the b-12 shots and ginseng supplements those help pass the day.

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Alison Cassidy 15 April 2008

Fine poetic snapshots of a very interesting writer with a flare for language and a tendency to the melancholic. Clever poem. Not a word wasted. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Jurietta Duraan 16 April 2008

Very good word play - hints of satire? it flows and flows... good one! remember to keep it coming - I'm going to run out soon. Yuri*

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Ivor Hogg 16 April 2008

an engaging write about being disengaged.Imagintive use or words a touch satyrical tinged with underlying sadness

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Delilah Miller 10 July 2008

Absolutely agree with Janice. It's almost of parody of performance poetry, but when it actually does end with a bang it actually left it on a serious note for me. The jaunty rhyme scheme helped add the chaos element. It's a home run in my book! Delilah

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Janice Windle 10 May 2008

This had me laughing out loud on the word 'Sunny'! Then I fried reading it aloud. It's a fantastic poem to chant. I love this. I shall come back to it and chant it again - it's given me an appetite for chanting it!

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Interesting poem that gives the reader a smile...and it is just a good piece of poetry. Great imagery......Keep sharing. Shelley

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Tsira Goge 30 April 2008

A naturalized naturalist, Pessimistic Pacifist It’s safe to say That I’m not very Sunny. ............ Hello David, I like these last lines very much... Thank you for your fine the comment. Tsira

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Onelia Avelar 29 April 2008

Your poems are sort of a challenge for the imagination - the images and views are changing so fast i need a rest :) . Let me see what is the next.

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