David DeSantis

Rookie (01/29/85 / Utica, NY)

Big Bang Theory - Poem by David DeSantis

I’m a train track
With a knack
for coffee.

A one-way ocean liner
Powered by steam
And defiant of the currents
Around me…

I used to love the art scene
And often,
incongruent things:

like some sort of cataract,
eye clean

I am a ying-yang
Thought stream
Powered by
feng shui
energy beams

A naturalized naturalist,

It’s safe to say
That I’m not very


Copyright (c) David DeSantis

Comments about Big Bang Theory by David DeSantis

  • (7/10/2008 11:03:00 AM)

    Absolutely agree with Janice. It's almost of parody of performance poetry, but when it actually does end with a bang it actually left it on a serious note for me. The jaunty rhyme scheme helped add the chaos element. It's a home run in my book!

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  • (5/10/2008 3:22:00 PM)

    This had me laughing out loud on the word 'Sunny'! Then I fried reading it aloud. It's a fantastic poem to chant. I love this. I shall come back to it and chant it again - it's given me an appetite for chanting it! (Report) Reply

  • (5/9/2008 11:29:00 PM)

    Interesting poem that gives the reader a smile...and it is just a good piece of poetry.
    Great imagery......Keep sharing.
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  • (4/30/2008 3:38:00 PM)

    A naturalized naturalist,

    It’s safe to say
    That I’m not very

    Hello David,
    I like these last lines very much...
    Thank you for your fine the comment.
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  • (4/29/2008 2:50:00 PM)

    Your poems are sort of a challenge for the imagination - the images and views are changing so fast i need a rest :) . Let me see what is the next. (Report) Reply

  • Loyd C. Taylor, Sr. (4/24/2008 7:41:00 AM)

    Hello poet David. Great read man. LC (Report) Reply

  • (4/19/2008 11:01:00 AM)

    A great run of images that flow seamlessly into one another - the sponteneity of thought echoes loud and clear - a revealing and emotionally charged write. j. (Report) Reply

  • (4/18/2008 2:25:00 PM)

    Oh my God! ! ! I love this poem! It is shockingly pungent and bitter sweet. At a moment I felt a George Carlin tone, but you 'wacked' your own unique verbato in the last few lines.

    Wonderous, truly!
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  • (4/17/2008 3:34:00 AM)

    Loved this David, a wonderful play on words, I am interested in the Big Bang theory myself lol,10 for this,
    Lynda xx
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  • (4/16/2008 3:40:00 PM)

    an engaging write about being disengaged.Imagintive use or words a touch satyrical tinged with underlying sadness (Report) Reply

  • Yuri Duraan (4/16/2008 2:50:00 PM)

    Very good word play - hints of satire? it flows and flows... good one! remember to keep it coming - I'm going to run out soon. Yuri* (Report) Reply

  • (4/15/2008 8:21:00 PM)

    Fine poetic snapshots of a very interesting writer with a flare for language and a tendency to the melancholic. Clever poem. Not a word wasted. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ (Report) Reply

  • (4/14/2008 1:02:00 PM)

    another great poem by the poet desantis. don't forget about the b-12 shots and ginseng supplements those help pass the day. (Report) Reply

  • (4/14/2008 10:17:00 AM)

    Wow! That is sooo good! I love the flow of words, the poem reads really well. Good one David. HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, April 14, 2008

Poem Edited: Saturday, May 10, 2008

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