Black Soul Poem by Ernest Makuakua

Black Soul

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black soul
sometimes it feels heavy
sometimes hard to go on
sometimes giving up feels like an option

Dear so far yet so near the end
black soul

competitive as it is trying by all means to drop you when you rise up
cooperative at times
decorative at some times
destructive most times heh black soul

shows no mercy its a child yet drops it like a hot potato burning it like a hot coal
lets go it says
i don't want to witness this
is it so?

child. mother, sister, brother, friend there a black soul
can i ever find peace, under this dark cloud covering the whole host i live in?
black soul.

we work yet our efforts goes to waste, wash the pain yet stains remain
we talk yet our words are ignored im sure we are seen yet too dark to be saved

sometimes heavy to carry the burden how will i go on?

carry on you will find a way

how can i find a way in the dark

dark soul
that pushes us to the point where we never want to reach, but must i realy take my life over this?

i'm taking over my life about this
Black soul.

Saturday, December 19, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: darkness
we so find ourselves trapped sometimes that we forget that we have only one life that was borrowed to us to make change to our challenges. we always have a choice for after each rain theres surely a rainbow at the end if not a cool breeze.
Ernestine Northover 28 December 2015

A good story line well presented and expressive showing how one feels when darkness overtakes us. Well thought out and with some drama t o add to the poem. Well done.

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Gajanan Mishra 28 December 2015

How can I find a way in the dark- philosophical one, , thanks.

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Ernest Makuakua 29 December 2015

thank you guys for the input im blessed by your work too hope you'll enjoy my other pieces too

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Valsa George 29 December 2015

Sometimes we are caught in the tangles of darkness! We feel there's no way out, but if we try earnestly to get out of that darkness, we might find a way to light! So never give up hope! Such feelings of depression are quite natural to everyone at one time or the other in life! Powerfully put!

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Bharati Nayak 04 January 2016

We sometimes come under the trap of negative feelings like doubts, and frustrations when life looks heavy and burdensome.We loose faith in ourselves.Our soul becomes black soul loosing all jest for life.We should not let ourselves come under this trap.We have only one birth and so live it joyfully.

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Diane Montemayor 18 February 2017

Dear Sir Ernest, Wow, great poem. Very emotional and powerful poem sir..... Discrimination in nationality, race and ethnicity can not be controlled, because it is actually a nature of human being...What matters most is the goodness of heart and soul that only God can see it.......Thanks for sharing this poem sir.. Sincerely, diane

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Ernest Makuakua 03 June 2016

Glad you did Sister. thanks

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Sindiswa Ndamane 03 June 2016

beautifully written, i enjoyed it...

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Ernest Makuakua 05 May 2016

thank you for your comments good people NGC JIYA

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Howard Savage 19 January 2016

Great poem with true sentiments and spirit. don't give up for I am a black soul as well. Remember man was made out of the dust of the ground. The best soil is black soil. Rich soil. Keep writing You are headed to the top.

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