We can make history,
Explore the world beyond boundary,
We can soar the unlimited sky;
Spread our wings and fly.
Different interests, yet aiming for one;
Glow like silver brighter than the sun,
Mark the time with blazing hearts,
Help the ruins to make a brand new start.
Social insect is like what we are;
Ambassadors of peace not war,
Handymen of the mischief of our elders;
Making the best things more better.
In the table of brotherhood we'll dine;
Variety of races will intertwine,
The banner of love will be unroll,
All for one, one for all.
It's always a pleasure to read an upbeat and optimistic poem, Juneil. You express many fine ideals in this poem and your words evoke some superb imagery as well. I am left wondering, however, whether this is a free verse poem or a rhyming poem, like a quatrain, which is the form you apparently used. The problem is compounded by that fact that some lines indeed do rhyme while others do not. Your poem is expressive, which I like quite a bit. If you wish to write in certain poetic forms, however, I would suggest you find a guidebook in a good bookstore and read of their requirements and practice them. I am confident you will master them in a short time and produce some very good poems. Carl.
great advocate write..nice rhymes and delivering the message of peace and unity..10
I love the peace not war theme. It is very lovely, it gives a sense of freedom with the 'soar the unlimited sky' and freedom is grand.
I love the peace not war theme. It is very lovely, it gives a sense of freedom with the 'soar the unlimited sky' and freedom is grand.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Wonderfully rousing and electric in it's flow - - - I love it and am sure this will be well received - - - it has style and well thought out material....... more than 10 if I could - - - from Fay.....