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Crown Of Thorns

For one salubrious season
Bush tempered
And human nurtured
I rose red
Obediently
Unearthed and shaken
By my unfolding

I recover restless
Budding and blooming
From that hooded promise
I laundered my spirit
High and haughty
Above all the thorns

But wait

A reapers gloved hands
Are hacking
A personal fable
Is fading
A Perspex dream
Is shattering
As secateurs blades
Yawn gleaming
Surgically cutting candy


A coronet of crimson
Crowned with thorns
On shrouded laden tables
Less arrogant
Less celebrated
A withering, wiltering fate
Midst flat white champagne,
Ticker tape and cake

Sunday, February 15, 2015
Candy Poems: 66 / 500
Topic(s) of this poem: power,pride
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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Terry Craddock 22 November 2015

What a threat for the mind are the metaphoric images, startling unique, the contrast of word juxtaposition, renders a few old familiar themes, focused into vibrant new beams of perception. Love the power and originality of your images.

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Terry Craddock 17 December 2015

Originality Impales Mind's Eye treats for ebb mind are metaphoric images cast startling unique contrast juxtaposition word renders a few torn faded old thorn familiar themes cut fresh facet sliced focused into vibrant new beam perspectives perception light loves power pure insights originality sharp images impales mind's eye Copyright © Terence George Craddock Inspired by the poem 'Crown Of Thorns' by Simone Inez Harriman. Dedicated to the poet Simone Inez Harriman. Written in December 2015 on the 1&18.12.2015.

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Terry Craddock 17 December 2015

Red Rose Thorn Piercings threat for sponge mind metaphoric images startling unique cycles contrast juxtaposition renders tatty shabby burst itch bud focused themes purple skin vibrant veins perception wait pump cut crimson red Copyright © Terence George Craddock Inspired by the poem 'Crown Of Thorns' by Simone Inez Harriman. Dedicated to the poet Simone Inez Harriman. Written in December 2015 on the 1&18.12.2015.

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Pamela Sinicrope 21 May 2016

While the image of the crown of thorns evokes Christ and religion, the very quiet human image of flat white champagne brings the poem back to earth. Pride...it does interesting things to the psyche. I like this poem and your use of alliteration at the beginning and within words works well. Another really well done poem. Brings to mind my own personal failures and falls. Thanks.

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Michael Walker 28 April 2016

Very original and I like the image of a crown of thorns. M. Walker.

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Michael Walker 04 February 2019

Vivid images that stay in the mind: ' A coronet of crimson/ Crowned with thorns'. Fine poem.

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Kumarmani Mahakul 01 July 2018

Budding and blooming are natural processes. A coronet of crimson crowned with thorns amazes mind. Crown is the symbol of victory. This poem is well narrated. Re-visiting this values more....10

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Akhtar Jawad 04 April 2018

A coronet of crimson Crowned with thorns On shrouded laden tables Lovely lines.

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Michael Walker 05 March 2018

Most effective alliteration- 'a coronet of crimson/ crowned...' Excessive pride leads to a fall, which your dazzling poem hints at.

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Luo Zhihai 22 October 2017

????!????,????!???? Read the masterpiece! Feeling and sharing wonderful! Sincere greetings to you!

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