ONElia AVElar

Rookie - 46 Points (Bulgaria)

Eccentric - Poem by ONElia AVElar

He has never been to Jerusalem,
nor Mecca, never visited Tibet,
Bodh Gaya, Fatima or Saragossa,
neither seen the Pope in Rome,
nor the British Queen.
He is clerk in bank by day -
zealous pilgrim in a dream
and the holiest place for him
lies in the curve between
women`s neck and chin.

Comments about Eccentric by ONElia AVElar

  • (8/26/2009 12:13:00 PM)

    there's no difference between the higher states of meditation and sexual ecstacy... (Report) Reply

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  • (2/8/2009 1:42:00 PM)

    a strong message universal in tone.... (Report) Reply

  • (12/3/2008 2:40:00 PM)

    This is a lovely observation - as always from you, dear Onelia - and I fully understand the Eccentric's point of view. Not only men have these perceptions of beauty in a loved one's body and I relate to this so easily! (Report) Reply

  • C. P. Sharma (11/12/2008 3:47:00 AM)

    hi Onelia,
    After reading this poem my mind goes back to Shakespeare:

    'The lunatic, the lover and the poet
    Are of imagination all compact:
    One sees more devils than vast hell can hold,
    That is, the madman: the lover, all as frantic,
    Sees Helen's beauty in a brow of Egypt:
    The poet's eye, in fine frenzy rolling,
    Doth glance from heaven to earth, from earth to heaven'

    You are the poet, I am the lover and your poetry is the river in which I wish to bathe for ever.
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  • (10/12/2008 2:14:00 PM)

    Wow, Loved it... So enchanting and simply beautiful... :) (Report) Reply

  • Ashraful Musaddeq (10/2/2008 12:50:00 AM)

    Wow it is a wonderful poem Onelia. Amazingly beautiful.
    10+++ for it.
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  • (9/25/2008 9:40:00 AM)

    Dear Onelia Avelar, continuing to read your poems I discover new values in your poems. The Eccentric is a sample of a little dream for the man-in-the-street, who knows how to travel, at no expense (responds to my poems: The small hero, and the driver of Bronx) . So well planned, well-penned a poem. I give it a 10. Thanks
    Joseph Josephides
    Member of the International Society of Poets (ISP) Intern.Library of Poetry awarded
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  • (7/5/2008 3:25:00 AM)

    A special technical effect I find in this... well blended and really Onelia only you can do this so effectively.. Eccentric universally... great write and enjoyed.

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  • Palas Kumar Ray (6/7/2008 3:05:00 PM)

    Lovely..................well composed. (Report) Reply

  • (5/29/2008 6:46:00 AM)

    St Thomas says the Kingdom of Heaven is Within...or maybe as close as someones chin...Coach (Report) Reply

  • Vidyadhar Durgekar (5/21/2008 5:25:00 AM)

    Intersting imagery......... (Report) Reply

  • (5/16/2008 8:17:00 AM)

    A superb portrait - the closing lines are pure magic creating such a sensual image. justine (Report) Reply

  • (5/12/2008 9:26:00 AM)

    This is divine, that last line is a belter! I absolutely love it. Says it all.... HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

  • (4/29/2008 3:09:00 PM)

    are you describing me in this one ;) (Report) Reply

  • Donall Dempsey (4/7/2008 10:25:00 AM)

    Guess I am eccentric then...can only agree with the last line again and again and again and...

    love Donall Donall
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  • Dr.subhendu Kar (4/5/2008 9:11:00 AM)

    eclectically as sensous intensity
    when flows by the feeling eccentric
    as the ripples by the living organic, .....................still beautyful verse by the common feeling. well penned,10/10, thanks for sharing
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  • (4/2/2008 8:35:00 AM)

    Just read again. Lasting power. Effortlessly sensual.

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  • (4/1/2008 4:23:00 AM)

    Isn't 'curve' a sensual word? This is wonderfully composed, One. Love it.

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, April 1, 2008

Poem Edited: Monday, January 4, 2010

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