ONElia AVElar

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10 Moons, 9 Months - Poem by ONElia AVElar

10 moons,
9 months,
with 2 hearts,
pulsing in my body.
You try to teach me now
love, tolerance, compassion...
My Darling, maybe it`s just time
to repeat my most exciting,
10 moons,9 months long,
thorough body-
lesson? ...

Comments about 10 Moons, 9 Months by ONElia AVElar

  • Ruby Honeytip (1/3/2013 2:33:00 PM)

    This is beautiful writing with great subject....what else should inspire but the miracle of creation and the love that starts it: -)
    I wrote one on Motherhood too [3
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  • Anil Kumar Panda (6/17/2011 7:39:00 AM)

    beautiful ink.full of love and emotion.loved it. (Report) Reply

  • Hans Vr (5/22/2010 7:19:00 AM)

    100 % enjoyable
    Very very well written.
    Touching, full of feeling
    Any child would like you as a mother

    Even the shape of the text looks like a pregnant belly

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  • Prashant Shaurya (12/21/2009 1:51:00 AM)

    brilliant poetry madam..
    well this is what motherhood is all about..
    and mothers are the idols of love, care, compassion and many more virtues..
    God bless you..
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  • Vidyadhar Durgekar (5/10/2009 9:05:00 AM)

    A goodd poem with substance of love........... (Report) Reply

  • (4/14/2009 5:58:00 AM)

    nice poem, well done
    thanks for sharing
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  • (1/16/2009 3:51:00 AM)

    hw the body whispers in lil throbs...a bond of body language between the two hearts within... (Report) Reply

  • (1/7/2009 2:28:00 PM)

    Beautiful sentiments which as a mere man I can only envy (Report) Reply

  • Naseer Ahmed Nasir (1/5/2009 5:19:00 AM)

    An amazing poem....two passions in one poem. (Report) Reply

  • (10/20/2008 12:14:00 PM)

    Wow... What a beautiful bond of two souls in one body... You felt, lived and portrayed that special bond of a fetus and a mother in an exquisite way. Women will always remain superior to men, because she can be a mother; a man can not… Loved your simplicity and purity… Regards, Kamran (Report) Reply

  • (10/16/2008 7:29:00 AM)

    I love this poem Onelia, it is beautiful just because of the extreme feminine angle to it but also so very tender. I had to come back to re-read your wonderful work. The shape of the wording also lends itself to the subject - Bravo! HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

  • Indira Renganathan (8/14/2008 3:48:00 AM)

    I love short poems Yours is exceptionally good.I like the way you present your thoughts 10 and more. And thanks for your comments on mine too (Report) Reply

  • Adeline Foster (7/28/2008 3:58:00 PM)

    Shape poetry is so much fun. I enjoyed this one. I’m sure you knew that two moons in one month is called a blue moon. I like your title although I would have titled it Blue Moon. Since I am the mother of twins, I first thought of the two hearts pulsing as, Aha, she has had twins. But no, I was wrong. A wonderful poem.
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  • (7/12/2008 1:16:00 AM)

    very good poem this...that is the treasure one woman - well why a woman alone? -a parent cherishes in the early days of marriage...wonderful presentation, ane...10 (Report) Reply

  • Palas Kumar Ray (6/23/2008 10:34:00 AM)

    May I confess, firstly I could not read out the inner meaning of your poetic expressions of a becoming mother, I've always been an idiot of high grade(A-1) , but remarks of Rema and C.P.Sharma made me feel what's what.
    The poetry, I take leave from commenting.
    I just agree with Rema and Sharma.
    Wishing you both (two hearts) the loveliest to happen.
    L O V E
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  • (6/23/2008 12:53:00 AM)

    I liked this one for its conceptual brilliance... amazing
    from my heart I can sing those lines
    thank you for sharing this wonderful composition 10 moon,9months....

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  • C. P. Sharma (6/2/2008 10:47:00 AM)

    The words fail to express the joy of new creative process of of those nine months in the life of a woman. A divine experience that you have conveyed so poetically in so simple and a few words. An example of consumate poetry pouring out of your soul. (Report) Reply

  • (5/29/2008 6:39:00 AM)

    Beautiful and must be an amazing experience...Coach (Report) Reply

  • (5/6/2008 5:01:00 AM)

    What a beautiful poem. The sentiments expressed are so tender and mirror exactly how all women whilst pregnant must feel. (though not so many of them could express so eloquently) . I love the shape of the poem too, the growing womb as it expands. A beautiful and very cleverly constructed piece of poetry. HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

  • (5/4/2008 8:09:00 AM)

    Such a beautiful concept about conception and swaddled in such beautifull imagery. Carrying someone within you and literally close to your heart and the poem really brings home the truth and the reality of this. Absolutely beautiful. love it so much.

    love Dee Dee(that's Wright...right!)
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, April 10, 2008

Poem Edited: Friday, June 17, 2011

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