Udaya R. Tennakoon


Evening Walk - Poem by Udaya R. Tennakoon

Aimless mind slap bang
Coated out to spring
Dressed up, bear body hiding
Set out the old road along

The bus or the tram
Unless may be the train
To right or the left no plan
Time and space came

The side where I belonged to
The tram was on way from left to
Undecided space came think to
Opened the door just get into

Passengers were on seats
Passersby were in streets
Seemed to be direct targets
Looking at their end points

Planned and minded among
Blank and aimless I am
Getting down one by one
One and only in I am

Reverse way to the direction
Same as the tram to go again
Waiting for till times come
End or the beginning no aim

Passengers were on seats
Passersby were in streets
Driver is on the seat
I am also on my seat

All they know their aim
I don't have a plan
Left or the right same
Just for the pass time


Comments about Evening Walk by Udaya R. Tennakoon

  • Pamela Sinicrope (2/24/2017 10:51:00 AM)


    I tried to comment once before, but PH got stuck. Congratulations on getting Poem of the Day. I saw your poem like a mirror and it's reflection. Similar- but reversed. On one side, the ability to walk aimless is a wonderful freeing experience...on the other, it could be alienation...separated from the rest of the world from which you walk around. I wrote sometime longer the first time, but it got lost! Again, congratulations on your expressive write. (Report) Reply

    Udaya R. Tennakoon Udaya R. Tennakoon (2/25/2017 10:42:00 PM)

    Thanks Dear Pam.! ! !

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  • Pamela Sinicrope (2/24/2017 10:38:00 AM)


    Congratulations on Member Poem of the Day. I am a little late, but haven't been on PH in a while. I like the concept of your poem. The idea of passing time and having the freedom to do so while everyone else seems to have such purpose or responsibility is awesome. Well done. Take care. (Report) Reply

  • (2/13/2017 11:24:00 PM)


    Congrats on member poem of the Day. (Report) Reply

  • (2/13/2017 10:07:00 PM)

    POETRY NONSENSE
    What is this my friend? From the way readers have praised you here, I thought probably you have experimented with your poetry. But painful re-reading suggests that you have written nonsense. Try to improve your writing skills man. Don't be misled by the praise. They might even not have gone through your poem. Commenting for most of them is a daily ritual to improve their standing. (Report) Reply

  • Chinedu Dike (2/13/2017 6:58:00 PM)


    Lovely piece of poetry, well articulated and nicely brought forth in beautiful rhyme scheme with conviction. Thanks for sharing Udaya. (Report) Reply

  • Christina Simmons (2/13/2017 9:17:00 AM)

    Evening Walk:
    It is just so crazy and muddle up just like a walk in the evening sometime feels. Out for the sake of being in the open air. Well done for putting it across in the way you have. Good write! ! ! (Report) Reply

    Udaya R. Tennakoon Udaya R. Tennakoon (2/13/2017 10:03:00 AM)

    Thanks dear Christina

  • Bharati Nayak (2/13/2017 8:16:00 AM)


    Some times we do not know where we are going.Life looks aimless and purposeless.Outwardly we appear as if going towards a destination, but inwardly we may feel vacant, without any aim.

    Passengers were on seats
    Passersby were in streets
    Driver is on the seat
    I am also on my seat

    All they know their aim
    I don't have a plan
    Left or the right same
    Just for the pass time
    - - - - - - - - -Congratulations for being selected as Poet Of the Day.
    (Report) Reply

    Udaya R. Tennakoon Udaya R. Tennakoon (2/13/2017 10:04:00 AM)

    Thanks dear Bharati..

  • Clarence Prince (2/13/2017 7:58:00 AM)


    Np plan, just for the past time!
    Ride on!
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    Udaya R. Tennakoon Udaya R. Tennakoon (2/13/2017 10:05:00 AM)

    Thanks dear Clarence

  • Edward Kofi Louis (2/13/2017 6:40:00 AM)

    Aimless
    Coated. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. (Report) Reply

    Udaya R. Tennakoon Udaya R. Tennakoon (2/13/2017 10:06:00 AM)

    Thanks dear Edward..

  • Anil Kumar Panda (2/13/2017 6:34:00 AM)


    With a nice flow and simple wordplay the poem is very nice to read. The first stanza where you dressed up is very interesting.Bear body hiding..... is so nice. Enjoyed. Congrats on being selected. (Report) Reply

  • Tom Allport (2/13/2017 3:32:00 AM)

    tom allport
    a go with the flow poem very well written. (Report) Reply

    Udaya R. Tennakoon Udaya R. Tennakoon (2/13/2017 4:46:00 AM)

    Thanks Dear Tom..

  • Daniel Brick (2/13/2017 2:09:00 AM)

    Evening Walk
    The title suggests this will be a quiet, sedate poem about something as conventional as a routine exercise. Instead you give us a poem of alienation on several levels. First, the speaker has no reason to walk or take the tram: observing the world around him is not his goal; other people are there but there is no engagement. Second, there is the existential alienation of a person who does not fit comfortably in his home space. It stems from thinking about society or the world, finding both inadequate reflections of his humanity. Where does this leave the speaker? Actually, no where, at least not anywhere THIS POEM reveals. But I read this poem as a provisional statement about this city of refugees. There is no way such a city can replace the cities of one's homeland. The adopted city is rooted in its place in other people's hearts, not the refugee's heart. (Report) Reply

    Udaya R. Tennakoon Udaya R. Tennakoon (2/13/2017 2:28:00 AM)

    Dear Daniel, much pleasure to read your thoughts and I am inspired by the last lines of yours he adopted city is rooted in its place in other people's hearts, not the refugee's heart.
    Thanks

  • Bernard F. Asuncion (2/13/2017 12:35:00 AM)


    All they know their aim..... congrats on being selected
    for tge day.....
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    Udaya R. Tennakoon Udaya R. Tennakoon (2/13/2017 2:24:00 AM)

    Thanks dear Bernard..

  • (9/14/2012 12:58:00 AM)


    Excellant piece, filled with rhyming in every stanze thank you for sharing (Report) Reply

  • (9/13/2012 5:50:00 AM)


    You've painted a very descriptive picture of what it's like being aimless and wandering in Basel. I can really get the feeling. You're very economical with your words; you say just enough to get the point across. Very concise. I like your poetry. (Report) Reply

  • (9/13/2012 5:37:00 AM)


    I like how you are so economical with your words; you say enough just to get the point across. I suppose being aimless in Switzerland isn't always so bad, but I get your sentiments about the awkwardness of lacking focus and direction. Nice poem. (Report) Reply

  • (9/8/2012 5:24:00 AM)


    Aimless and cluelss.. Beautifuly written. But those who have no aims in life never reach any where. I love to read your more poems. Sam (Report) Reply

  • Moha Abbou (9/7/2012 4:28:00 PM)


    It said that the good and the interesting poem is the one which tells a story and now I realized that by heart. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, September 7, 2012



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