Evening Walk Poem by Udaya R. Tennakoon

Evening Walk

Rating: 3.6


Aimless mind slap bang
Coated out to spring
Dressed up, bear body hiding
Set out the old road along

The bus or the tram
Unless may be the train
To right or the left no plan
Time and space came

The side where I belonged to
The tram was on way from left to
Undecided space came think to
Opened the door just get into

Passengers were on seats
Passersby were in streets
Seemed to be direct targets
Looking at their end points

Planned and minded among
Blank and aimless I am
Getting down one by one
One and only in I am

Reverse way to the direction
Same as the tram to go again
Waiting for till times come
End or the beginning no aim

Passengers were on seats
Passersby were in streets
Driver is on the seat
I am also on my seat

All they know their aim
I don't have a plan
Left or the right same
Just for the pass time

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Edward Kofi Louis 13 February 2017

Coated. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Udaya R. Tennakoon 13 February 2017

Thanks dear Edward..

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Bernard F. Asuncion 13 February 2017

All they know their aim..... congrats on being selected for tge day.....

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Udaya R. Tennakoon 13 February 2017

Thanks dear Bernard..

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Pamela Sinicrope 24 February 2017

I tried to comment once before, but PH got stuck. Congratulations on getting Poem of the Day. I saw your poem like a mirror and it's reflection. Similar- but reversed. On one side, the ability to walk aimless is a wonderful freeing experience...on the other, it could be alienation...separated from the rest of the world from which you walk around. I wrote sometime longer the first time, but it got lost! Again, congratulations on your expressive write.

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Udaya R. Tennakoon 25 February 2017

Thanks Dear Pam.! ! !

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Pamela Sinicrope 24 February 2017

Congratulations on Member Poem of the Day. I am a little late, but haven't been on PH in a while. I like the concept of your poem. The idea of passing time and having the freedom to do so while everyone else seems to have such purpose or responsibility is awesome. Well done. Take care.

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Ratnakar Mandlik 13 February 2017

Congrats on member poem of the Day.

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Rian John 13 February 2017

What is this my friend? From the way readers have praised you here, I thought probably you have experimented with your poetry. But painful re-reading suggests that you have written nonsense. Try to improve your writing skills man. Don't be misled by the praise. They might even not have gone through your poem. Commenting for most of them is a daily ritual to improve their standing.

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Chinedu Dike 13 February 2017

Lovely piece of poetry, well articulated and nicely brought forth in beautiful rhyme scheme with conviction. Thanks for sharing Udaya.

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