Udaya R. Tennakoon

Evening Walk - Poem by Udaya R. Tennakoon

Aimless mind slap bang
Coated out to spring
Dressed up, bear body hiding
Set out the old road along

The bus or the tram
Unless may be the train
To right or the left no plan
Time and space came

The side where I belonged to
The tram was on way from left to
Undecided space came think to
Opened the door just get into

Passengers were on seats
Passersby were in streets
Seemed to be direct targets
Looking at their end points

Planned and minded among
Blank and aimless I am
Getting down one by one
One and only in I am

Reverse way to the direction
Same as the tram to go again
Waiting for till times come
End or the beginning no aim

Passengers were on seats
Passersby were in streets
Driver is on the seat
I am also on my seat

All they know their aim
I don't have a plan
Left or the right same
Just for the pass time

Comments about Evening Walk by Udaya R. Tennakoon

  • (9/14/2012 12:58:00 AM)

    Excellant piece, filled with rhyming in every stanze thank you for sharing (Report) Reply

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  • (9/13/2012 5:50:00 AM)

    You've painted a very descriptive picture of what it's like being aimless and wandering in Basel. I can really get the feeling. You're very economical with your words; you say just enough to get the point across. Very concise. I like your poetry. (Report) Reply

  • (9/13/2012 5:37:00 AM)

    I like how you are so economical with your words; you say enough just to get the point across. I suppose being aimless in Switzerland isn't always so bad, but I get your sentiments about the awkwardness of lacking focus and direction. Nice poem. (Report) Reply

  • (9/8/2012 5:24:00 AM)

    Aimless and cluelss.. Beautifuly written. But those who have no aims in life never reach any where. I love to read your more poems. Sam (Report) Reply

  • Moha Abbou (9/7/2012 4:28:00 PM)

    It said that the good and the interesting poem is the one which tells a story and now I realized that by heart. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, September 7, 2012

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