Fast Food Poem by Delicate Heart

Fast Food

Rating: 3.8


'Beauty was made from her eyes.
Soon they move, I fly into the skies.
Your charming eyes are my light.
When truely at night I lose my sight.
Without their lights the moon.
Would be darkish quite soon.
Wherever I see your eyes.
My heart stops his soul cries.
When I stray and go away.
By your eyes I find my way.
Your eyes'beauty feeds all.
Nature, human still their soul'.
'With every motion of your lip.
My heartbeats, they will whip.
Watching them when in touch.
Inner love grows, oh! so much'.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
T S 06 May 2009

A very romantic write...10/10

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Slade Oriley 06 May 2009

It looks like somebody has been bitten by the love bug. (lol) I like it. I can tell you put alot of thought into it and it's very creative. Great Job. :)

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Lynda Robson 06 May 2009

A lighthearted love poem, well written by you, 10 Lynda xx

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 06 May 2009

One can starve for such beautiful delicious eyes. A wonderful yummy yummy poem.......10/10. Best Wishes Naseer

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Fay Slimm 06 May 2009

Catchy title which, leading into quite a surprise subject afterwards, gives an air of extra care to this poem - - rhyming good and flow, although interrupted by irregular metre, is still most pleasant...... a warm and honest write and 10 from Fay..

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Saadat Tahir 04 July 2009

observant...converse in the delicate itsy bitsy of love language hiding behind a huge cheese burger very nice liked the following remarks too Ben Gieske (5/9/2009 9: 12: 00 AM) Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon. cheers

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Absent Wryta 10 May 2009

This is a lovely poem, quite an intense love. A nicely composed piece, pleasure to read

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Ben Gieske 09 May 2009

Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon.

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soso Khan 07 May 2009

it was great i loved it alot 10++

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Ruth Walters 06 May 2009

The sentiment is very romantic and seems to depict the first rush of love. Do you want a proper critique of the poem as a poem or just on the meaning of the verse? Ruth

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