Delicate Heart


Fast Food - Poem by Delicate Heart

'Beauty was made from her eyes.
Soon they move, I fly into the skies.
Your charming eyes are my light.
When truely at night I lose my sight.
Without their lights the moon.
Would be darkish quite soon.
Wherever I see your eyes.
My heart stops his soul cries.
When I stray and go away.
By your eyes I find my way.
Your eyes'beauty feeds all.
Nature, human still their soul'.
'With every motion of your lip.
My heartbeats, they will whip.
Watching them when in touch.
Inner love grows, oh! so much'.


Comments about Fast Food by Delicate Heart

  • Saadat Tahir (7/4/2009 1:38:00 PM)

    observant...converse in the delicate itsy bitsy of love language hiding behind a huge cheese burger
    very nice
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    Ben Gieske (5/9/2009 9: 12: 00 AM)

    Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon.

    cheers
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  • (5/10/2009 6:45:00 PM)

    This is a lovely poem, quite an intense love. A nicely composed piece, pleasure to read (Report)Reply

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  • (5/9/2009 9:12:00 AM)

    Fast FOOd - your title is interesting. I imagine the OO as possibly being two open mouths ready to eat the fast food, or two wide-open eyes filled with wonder, or one of them being the moon. (Report)Reply

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  • (5/7/2009 1:03:00 PM)

    it was great i loved it alot 10++ (Report)Reply

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  • (5/6/2009 1:17:00 PM)

    The sentiment is very romantic and seems to depict the first rush of love. Do you want a proper critique of the poem as a poem or just on the meaning of the verse?

    Ruth
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  • (5/6/2009 9:21:00 AM)

    A very romantic write...10/10 (Report)Reply

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  • (5/6/2009 5:52:00 AM)

    It looks like somebody has been bitten by the love bug. (lol) I like it. I can tell you put alot of thought into it and it's very creative. Great Job. :) (Report)Reply

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  • (5/6/2009 4:56:00 AM)

    A lighthearted love poem, well written by you,
    10
    Lynda xx
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  • Naseer Ahmed Nasir (5/6/2009 3:28:00 AM)

    One can starve for such beautiful delicious eyes. A wonderful yummy yummy poem.......10/10.

    Best Wishes
    Naseer
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  • Fay Slimm (5/6/2009 12:15:00 AM)

    Catchy title which, leading into quite a surprise subject afterwards, gives an air of extra care to this poem - - rhyming good and flow, although interrupted by irregular metre, is still most pleasant...... a warm and honest write and 10 from Fay.. (Report)Reply

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  • (5/5/2009 5:08:00 PM)

    this is beautiful, well done! (Report)Reply

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  • (5/5/2009 5:07:00 PM)

    this is a good poem when someone reads the title they'll think its about food but its about love.......10 (Report)Reply

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  • (5/5/2009 4:52:00 PM)

    yout rhyming is pretty good but lack of meter interrupts the smooth flow read aloud (Report)Reply

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  • (5/5/2009 4:50:00 PM)

    pretty good! ! ! beauty feeds all... nice job! ! (Report)Reply

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  • (5/5/2009 4:27:00 PM)

    i love it it is a really good poem much to me thay go with my feelings (Report)Reply

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  • (5/5/2009 4:26:00 PM)

    wow! that poem is great! ! i really really liked it! keep on! i feel we both have the same type of poetry stay in touch! (Report)Reply

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  • James Mclain (5/5/2009 3:45:00 PM)

    You found that hard to reach rhythm, could you have run across the sky even more...yes I think you could have...iip (Report)Reply

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  • (5/5/2009 3:44:00 PM)

    i love this poem
    very creative
    keep up the good work
    best of wishes
    Ashleymarie
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  • (5/5/2009 3:28:00 PM)

    it was really good keep it up.10+++++ (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, May 5, 2009

Poem Edited: Friday, September 16, 2011


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