Chuck Audette

Rookie - 9 Points (Poetry Hell, Vermont)

First Dates And Coffee Shops - Poem by Chuck Audette

a heart
black like my coffee
or clouded with cream
or sugary sweet
but not the one of my dreams

this mug is too chipped
or frail
or cracked
styrofoam? !
no thank you, something still lacked

EXTRA GRANDE
with cara-mel de-light
too big for my hand -
something ain't right

scalding hot
and bitter, too
or thinks it's all great
and hasn't a clue

overpriced
underfilled
weak or too strong
no matter the cause
there was still something wrong

I always found grounds
for a need to re-order
and I tried coffee shops
north and south of the border

But it's all been for naught
yet there's no need to grouse
for I've got a thought
I should try the tea house


Comments about First Dates And Coffee Shops by Chuck Audette

  • (5/29/2009 2:16:00 AM)


    Loved it! The humor at the end topped it off! I have a friend who always complains about her coffee and I said 'you know what they do when you send coffee back, they spit in it! She hasn't sent hers back again. Therefore, it is far better for you to have tea (hee hee) . 10 Karin Anderson (Report) Reply

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  • Dorothy- A. Holmes (11/6/2007 10:50:00 PM)


    10! You deserve it!

    Most Sincerely

    Dorothy
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  • (9/10/2006 7:46:00 AM)


    i've tried to make the crossover myself, but couldnt do it. i just love coffee - the
    aroma the taste the variations. you roped me in with this - in your opening lines
    esp. liked. do have trouble following some of the analogies, tho. Sus
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  • (5/2/2006 10:35:00 AM)


    Okay, pal: Is THIS your 100th or am I totally backward-counting challenged? ? ? ! CONGRATULATIONS on hanging in there and too, THANKS for doing so! ! ! PH wouldn't be the same without you. Est : ] (Report) Reply

  • Linda Ori (5/1/2006 12:08:00 AM)


    Sometimes a cup of good ole' black coffee is better than all the fluff. Nothing to hide, just pure and delicious! (Also good medicine for a hangover!) Tasty little poem.........................
    Linda
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  • (4/25/2006 3:38:00 PM)


    I'd like mine hot, tasty and keeping me up all night ;) (Report) Reply

  • (4/21/2006 11:59:00 AM)


    Delightful comparisons here - felines and caffeine....(does that rhyme if you say it with a New York accent? Tea, some would agree is far more sophisticated.... :) Justine. (Report) Reply

  • (4/19/2006 4:29:00 AM)


    Great metaphors, great poem. I'll take a rich Italian! Although I do like a nice cuppa tea - as long as it's Fair Trade...no lies, doesn't hurt anyone and keeps it's promises.
    Hugs
    Anna xxx
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  • Ernestine Northover (4/18/2006 9:05:00 AM)


    An interesting write Charles, one could never get 'browned off' by your poetry. Love Ernestine XXX (Report) Reply

  • (4/18/2006 3:23:00 AM)


    Interesting intertwining of the two subjects, and I've certainly had dates with women who, like coffee, were bitter or bland. I didn't always follow your metaphor through the poem - e.g., styrofoam? . Starts right out very strong and has your usual cleverness. (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2006 6:55:00 PM)


    A clever (need to consult thesaurus!) rumination on the title subjects, Chuck... If you were single, I'd say, Find the barrista of your dreams; you'll be in Java Shangri-La! Lots of great lines, but I'm partial to 'or thinks it's all great and hasn't a clue'.
    Est : ]
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Poem Submitted: Monday, April 17, 2006



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