Chuck Audette

Rookie - 59 Points (Poetry Hell, Vermont)

A Fleeting Thought - Poem by Chuck Audette

I watched the days
and time
fly by

Sparrows -
their songs too brief


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  • (11/28/2013 11:30:00 PM)

    A fleeting thought, perhaps, but the one that most definitely lingers....less is more and every single word here counts. Lovely Chuck... (Report)Reply

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  • Smoky Hoss (9/22/2012 5:24:00 PM)

    Days move in ages, and time in moments; sparrows live many days, but a song is gone in a moment of wonder.
    BEAUTIFUL poem Chuck.
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  • (8/9/2012 8:27:00 PM)

    This little gem is brief, but rich and enduring. (Report)Reply

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  • (3/7/2010 1:18:00 PM)

    Your touch is as light as a feather here...well done. (Report)Reply

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  • (9/14/2009 2:20:00 PM)

    Aren't we all just little sparrows and now with technology so cheap, we all, on 'Twitter' tweet, tweet, tweet..... but for this little sparrow, please, write more poems such as these; -)

    Ruthy (alias 'Little Sparrow' come read mine...please) : -)
    (oh gosh, I do hope you've heard of 'Twitter' it's this new internet site you see, where people write down their thoughts...otherwise you might think I'm completely out of my tree, heh heh)
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  • (5/29/2009 6:19:00 AM)

    Wonderful use of metaphor. The loveliness of your fleeting
    thought lingers in the mind.

    Warm regards,

    Sandra
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  • (4/9/2009 8:53:00 AM)

    this haiku looking seemingly innocous devouring depth of thought good work Chuck (Report)Reply

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  • (2/10/2009 5:25:00 AM)

    I've always found sparrows to be rather insignificant little things, your poem brings them to life though. HG: -) xx (Report)Reply

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  • Dorothy- A. Holmes (4/17/2008 5:11:00 PM)

    Very nice my dear...at what age did you first notice this? (smile)


    Dorothy
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  • (12/15/2007 9:02:00 PM)

    Time is too short, isn't it Chuck? But the bright side is that God will grant you a whole 24 hours tomorrow to compensate for the time missed yesterday. Beautifully expressed! Take care, Beth (Report)Reply

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  • Adeline Foster (12/10/2007 4:09:00 PM)

    Hey Charles:
    I agree with most of the below. But keep the time and the days, they do serve their purpose. You would be great at Haiku. Perhaps you are; I just have to read on.
    Adeline
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  • (4/14/2007 11:01:00 AM)

    Rewrite of a comment lost in transition from write to send:
    is not 'days' a subset of 'time', hence a redundancy? Just wondering why you felt it necessary - poem would be wonderful without it, but, an excellent short piece capturing the brief moment of a sparrow's song. Not even sure if I have ever heard one-nightingale and lark, yes-sparrow, hmmm don't really recall. In NYC we don't see many; nor in Floroda -maybe in the Carolinas or PA.
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  • john tiong chunghoo (7/6/2006 10:57:00 AM)

    this sounds like a japanese tanka.

    sparrows' song
    another day passes
    as i sip coffee
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  • (4/13/2006 1:25:00 PM)

    You have a gift to capture so much and leave a lasting imprint with your economy of words. Warmest wishes, Justine (Report)Reply

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  • (3/26/2006 3:25:00 PM)

    What a beautiful poem! You said so much with a few words. I especially liked the
    last two lines.
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  • (3/6/2006 10:19:00 PM)

    I like how you pack so much into a short poem, Charles.

    dan
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  • (2/22/2006 9:29:00 AM)

    I like the way you used spare words to convey a deep truth. Also, liking the use of the word 'fly' as it relates to both time and sparrows. Lovely. Thanks. (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, May 6, 2005



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