For Sale Poem by Mary Spain

For Sale

Rating: 4.9

My home for fourteen years, but, in your eyes,
It's termed a saleable commodity.
Absurd to feel defensive, but it's me
You're wounding when you pause to criticise
A creaking door, or look with pained surprise
At peeling paint. Somehow I didn't see
Those grubby marks until you came; the tree
You call a hazard is a friend I prize.
I shall grow hardened to this new-found pain,
I shall show people round and gain the skill
Of placing potted plants to hide the stain
That time has wreaked upon the window-sill.
But, as a traitor, how can I explain
To bricks and mortar that I love it still?

Marilyn Shepperson 10 August 2006

Oh yes, I've had a house like that and feel like that about this one. This is a brilliant poem and should be submitted to a magazine

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Gina Onyemaechi 31 August 2006

I've been there as well, Mary. You have spoken my exact sentiments. Thank you for showing me that I'm not the only one who grows attached to 'bricks and mortar'!

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Marvin Brato 11 October 2006

You are like my mom very who values memories of the past, keep it in her heart and always love antics because of it memorable history not value.Loved it.take my 10.

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Frank Cannon 04 March 2007

I think it was Eliot who said that poetry is finding something to say about everyday things but saying it diffently and well. You have definitely acheived that with this piece. Reminding the reader of the value of a home which is not the same as the valuation of a house.

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Adeline Foster 27 August 2008

Again, a great sonnet. You do sonnets very well. Adeline

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Glen Kappy 08 August 2018

another good sonnet i relate to, mary. just this morning i was talking with my brother and sister-in-law as we were on a morning walk about all that goes into the upkeep of a house. -glen

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Eyan Desir 29 November 2009

Well Expressed......10s

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Noha El3wdy 24 May 2009

sensetive, simple and touching. home is home

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Ashraful Musaddeq 15 May 2009

'But, as a traitor, how can I explain To bricks and mortar that I love it still? ' Amazing poem 10++

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foxy babii 12 November 2008

hehe that is a reallly good poem i really enjoyed it awesome work

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