David DeSantis

Rookie (01/29/85 / Utica, NY)

Girls - Poem by David DeSantis

It has suddenly become clear to me
That all women lack some honesty
In their glance
is a bigotry
Most superficial
by decree

You see:

A woman thinks with emotion
With the heart of an open ocean
Filled with warmth and some despair
Happiness and minor care
Where tides can change so quickly
Like a deep tsunami upon the sea
Swallowed whole if not with guide
A man must sometimes forget his pride
And remember most logically
That a woman lives on irregularity
Because if you should not take heed
Then I promise you alone shall be.
So when in pain you find this cancer,
then perhaps seek one more answer,
A tall, thin, dress less standard,
Forget the girlfriend
buy an exotic dancer.


Copyright (c) David DeSantis


Comments about Girls by David DeSantis

  • (7/23/2008 11:09:00 PM)


    although I personally disagree, this was an amazing poem. An absolute 10/10
    Ps. Maybe your just going for the wrong type of women
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  • (7/11/2008 4:27:00 PM)


    ha ha... think you got us all figured out hey.... either way you will pay :) I like the tsunami line - enjoy the ride! (Report) Reply

  • (7/10/2008 11:18:00 AM)


    Eh, what are you going to do? Everybody is a cliche, no? And men and women are opposites, some would argue compliments. Anyway, it was honest and it was clean cut so I liked it. (Report) Reply

  • (5/29/2008 1:23:00 PM)


    The sad force that shapes the truth in your poem is that, in our culture, men are raised to use power to get sex and women are raised to use sex to get power. The simple economic arrangement described here is at least honest even though love is nowhere on the premises. (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2008 8:12:00 PM)


    David, excellent poem - you are a man's man, my friend. (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2008 7:48:00 PM)


    Oh I bet the women just love you for this one.
    I have rarely seen a greater condemnation.

    GW62
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  • (5/6/2008 3:15:00 AM)


    Hmmm David, David, a GREAT poem. HOWEVER I got something about the 'male species' I wasnt going to put out. But since you got yours I think the female point of view should be made. But still I feel your poems. (Report) Reply

  • (5/5/2008 4:23:00 PM)


    I think you have nearly got the fair sex wighed up but be warned a lady friend of mine says a man who understands women is to be avoided at all costs (Report) Reply

  • (5/5/2008 2:25:00 AM)


    ..you v sure penetrated well into womans mind, ....bigotry you say, ...you couldn t
    possibly find a better word...
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  • (5/1/2008 8:21:00 PM)


    Yet another fine write my friend...I'm becoming quite a fan...(I'll be expecting DeSantis key-rings to be advertised on here soon) ..just make sure they've a bottle opener on them...mines worn out ;)

    Great job..but I'm at a loss when it comes to understanding these remarkable species also..

    all the best

    Jon
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  • (4/30/2008 11:58:00 PM)


    You might be right but then wrong at the same time, good poem (Report) Reply

  • (4/30/2008 7:54:00 AM)


    The secret is David, never try to understand us women, good write, made me smile,
    Lynda xx
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  • Paolo Giuseppe Mazzarello (4/30/2008 7:43:00 AM)


    Girls don't change easily their ideas. Sometimes their way of espressing themselves is very various. Their..their..it's better to share something more with women and so to use the adjective: our. (Report) Reply

  • john tiong chunghoo (4/29/2008 4:59:00 PM)


    dear david, this line is unique

    With the heart of an open ocean

    strangely the poem sounds like a dialogue.
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  • Loyd C. Taylor, Sr. (4/24/2008 7:48:00 AM)


    Hello poet David.
    Another very good poem, great work!
    LC
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  • (4/23/2008 3:03:00 AM)


    I think 'Pay for' an erotic dancer would sit better on the page David! but you are not wrong that women live on their emotions, which, as we all know, changes like the wind sometimes....that is the nature of women, we are meant to nurture and to do that, we have to be in touch with our emotions, for better or for worse! We women can be a man's curse. Smiling at you, one such woman! lol Tai (Report) Reply

  • (4/22/2008 6:55:00 PM)


    that is very wrong. not all girls are like that. (Report) Reply

  • (4/22/2008 2:00:00 PM)


    I am torn between defending my kind and rolling on the floor laughing. I'll grudgingly hand it to you- great read, David. (Report) Reply

  • (4/22/2008 8:02:00 AM)


    Should I defend my sex? Or laugh along? No point pretending to be torn - you have completely won me over! (Report) Reply

  • (4/19/2008 5:22:00 PM)


    I DO know that I shouldn't be smiling or nodding. t x (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, April 18, 2008

Poem Edited: Wednesday, March 4, 2009


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