A spider designs
A lovely flower falls in
And caught in its net.
A marvel of nature's manifestations portrayed beautifully through this verse. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you for your highly valuable comments.They are very encouraging.
Though it is your trial haiku yet it is a beautiful haiku with touching expression, the essence of the poem is too nice. Thanks for sharing.
Beautiful haiku! It's a little but powerful. In my point of how is a soul can catch his own lover. Thank you ma'am for sharing!
This spider vs. flower seems a bit symbolic to me. The spider spins this intricate and rather geometrically beautiful trap to get what he wants out of life- food in this case. Life scoffs at his hard work and sends a flower drifting into his trap instead of something he can eat. Not only that, but the very presence of a pretty flower blossom caught in the web warns the fly, the lady bug, the butterfly that there is a web strung there so they go elsewhere. All that spider's hard work has gone to waste all because a flower drifting by got snagged up. Poor hungry spider! I think however that the flower is happy with what she has accomplished. This haiku was fun! ! ! ! I got a whole story out of its three lines!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
and about kigo: the flower may speak of early spring..
well.. I took it as a blossom.. but there are no indications in your verse about the type of flower.. therfore it's not a real kigo. Yet, it can be accepted for haiku written by non Japanese as we are :)
It is wonderful that you know KIGO, the Japanese word for season word, and other essential knowledge about haiku. I invite you to look at my short series of haikus, JULY RAIN IN SEATTLE.